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kudanesh
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0 posted 2010-03-18 09:28 AM




Once upon a time
the sun did shine
and the wind filled the wings of a swallow

This swallow did sing
unto no one but him
Because he believed he had no rules to follow

While singing his song
he felt something was wrong
His tummy had become rather hollow

He found a nice spot
and there he did stop
As a cat came from no where and swallowed

At his demise he found out
with out a shred of doubt
We all have rules we must follow



[This message has been edited by kudanesh (03-18-2010 12:26 PM).]

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gilead
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1 posted 2010-03-18 02:53 PM


I really like this, a nice little tale, fable like, with a moral for living. Great work!

Art

kudanesh
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since 2007-12-01
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Peterborough,England
2 posted 2010-03-18 07:41 PM


thank you. kinda what I  hoped for.



Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2010-03-21 07:10 PM


Oh, no, I am so sorry for this singing swallow!

Dear Andrew, though it makes me sad, this is a very well written piece.

Love,
Margherita

kudanesh
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4 posted 2010-03-22 03:24 PM


Thank you. In way it makes me unhappy to hear that it makes you sad. But on the other hand it shows that you have a kind and caring heart
The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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5 posted 2010-03-25 01:05 PM




delightful Andrew, though I too feel sad for the swallow.


kudanesh
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6 posted 2010-03-27 09:49 PM


The rules of the world must apply. even the worlds most wonderful creatures have to follow some laws and rules. the poor swallow just found out the hard way

thank you for your comment

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