The Torch Singer: Lady Liberty

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threadbear
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0 posted 2010-03-08 02:23 PM

     The Torch Singer: Lady Liberty

   Singing just a few minutes past midnight
     only she could back the darkness into corners.
     With eyes of fireball blaze, and star gazes of calico
      she said she inherited all bad winds that blew her way.
   Even tomorrow was encased in moving mountains
     inescapable and unconquerable
     The gravity of the situation pulled her in
     and mad hatters wore top hats all wrong.

   This place doesn't know your name
     and will never ask for it.
   Torch singers with soot talents and knacks
     got the applause
     even before they sang.
   Milestones of life were delivered in holy notes
     They each had the sickness -
     no matter how decayed the audience was
     she had to get back onstage.

   The night wound on in tethered dithers and heavy decisions
     made easier by liquor.
     When the talking stopped
     the listening began
     They gathered her mysteries
     and one by one they fell into the deep well
     of her singing trance
     table by table they fell into the deep well
     of love and some of lust
    They all had a chance to consume her, they thought
    wrongly
     but she sang until rainbows appeared indoors
    in the darkest room, in the dirtiest recesses
    of my Lady's boudoir.

      It is all so very
lonely
      to be loved so much.

Jeff Feezle (c) 03.01.2010

[This message has been edited by threadbear (03-10-2010 04:45 AM).]

JenniferMaxwell

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1 posted 2010-03-08 10:28 PM

I like this piece very much, Jeff, very original with haunting lines and images.

threadbear
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2 posted 2010-03-08 11:52 PM

You're very sweet to take time to reply, Jennifurr. It wasn't until this year that I realized something:
the United States was the FIRST truly free country in the world! All the others were and had been, ruled by dictators, kings and queens.
People came here for a reason, and it was to embracce Lady Liberty.
Jeff

Margherita
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3 posted 2010-03-09 07:04 PM

quote:
Milestones of life were delivered in holy notes

...

When the talking stopped
the listening began
they gathered her mysteries
and one by one they fell into the deep well
of her singing trance

Yes, there are poetic peaks in this impressive write.

Beautiful thoughts.

Love,
Margherita

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4 posted 2010-03-09 07:30 PM

Very well done, Jeff. She is quite a lady, isn't she? Let's hope the US is not the LAST!

Robert E. Jordan
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5 posted 2010-03-09 07:59 PM

Yo Jeff,

I'll race you up the steps to the torch.

Bobby

threadbear
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6 posted 2010-03-10 12:59 PM

Thank you and Hi! Margherita!
There is so much mystery and history
in the life of the Lady.
Jeff

threadbear
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7 posted 2010-03-10 01:02 AM

Hey fellow Balladeer! My name on another site long ago was Shanachie (story-teller).

You picked up on the thesis of this poem: on what attracted people to this forbidden country in the first place. We knock the USA, but what a glorious place it's turned out to be: always changing, aging a bit,
with the Lady always the Vanguard.

Thanx, man, for the always kind words.
Jeff

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8 posted 2010-03-10 01:03 AM

Mr. Bobby,
right now You would win! I have a touch of bronchitis. I couldn't blow out the torch of a match, let alone Lady Liberty's flame! (and hopefully, no-one ever will)
Jeff

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9 posted 2010-03-10 07:09 AM

Dearest Jeff, so lovely and deep in meaning as you always do so well. I remember a trip to The Lady about 15 years ago and how amazing just the site of her is.

I hope despite the bronchitis that all is well with the two of you. Last night was the first night I think I have slept more than 2 hours at a time... in three months. Not bronchitis but just as irritating and exhausting.

As always,
M

Martie

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10 posted 2010-03-10 06:55 PM

Hi Jeff....She is only a story to me as I have never seen her near, upclose. But her purpose is what we tell ourselves, what we can be, write and how we are able to unfold our life...a magnificant symbol of many. Yes, a lonely place to be. I'm touched by this poem

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11 posted 2010-03-10 09:14 PM

A very interesting write my friend.

My wife and I went to see her many years ago

and we both felt a sense of awe as we gazed upon her. You wrote it well Jeff. Take care.

Lindsay

Zeigeist
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12 posted 2010-03-11 12:12 PM

Nice work Jeff, I enjoyed your pride showing in this one.

Zeitgeist

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13 posted 2010-03-12 01:06 AM

Hey-lo, Maur!
we're just two sprites locked in aging bodies! LOL I have cabin fever soooo bad! Thanks, my friend, for always checking in on us here. That means alot to me, M.
Jeff

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14 posted 2010-03-12 01:10 AM

Hi Martie!
Sup, Gal?
Your words echo why I wrote this in the first place. Like you, I've never met her in person. But I would like to say that I've touched her physically some day.
She is the greatest image in America on what symbolizes the soul of the USA.
Jeff

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15 posted 2010-03-12 01:11 AM

Hi, Lindsay! Wow, you made the trip from Oz all the way to NY?! I bet you have some cool stories. Maybe you can write your feelings about your visit in some poetry...
Jeff

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16 posted 2010-03-12 01:13 AM

Thanks so much, Zeitgeist!
You are right: my pride was showing a bit.
I have this fantasy of being able to take a small dime sized piece of the concrete base, and making it into a necklace somehow. It would remind me to always feel grateful for what God has blessed me with in this country.
Jeff

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