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Greeneyes
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0 posted 02-25-2010 01:45 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes




{~*~}

The dark skies
the winter storms
seasons   end
and hide  

between velvet robes of darkness
in a shadow of his whispering voice

touch
           movement  

                     stillness

how many stars have fallen since
the "edge of air"
where  earth  will round
and skies    pour

you can not face  midnights         with time  itself --
I do not feel the cold wind,  
nor fear the storm

I wait.

for how I feel touching you
when I am out of touch


left here, glancing round, above, beneath
the oceans scene
a temple of times     rebirth me in
one breath

under fragile motion --
   look how this changes me

powerful    between the void  
captive of wood
   the source of echoes

they know no other waters

in  blue        light
he touched my face

for a minute    I,     was     lost

laying        again       quiet
in wordless thought

falling snow  still touches me --

softly remembering     I
belong to you   for


the last dance

~~**~~
I never let one moment define me,
I define myself by all moments and how they teach and touch me......02  

© Copyright 2010 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-25-2010 03:51 PM       View Profile for secondhanddreampoet   Email secondhanddreampoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for secondhanddreampoet

fine imagery and Romanticism!

I am particularly fond of the ending:

“falling snow  still touches me --

  softly remembering     I
  belong to you   for


  the last dance”

much applause for this most interesting 'penning' !
Margherita
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2 posted 02-25-2010 05:14 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Dear Lauren, you have given me goosebumps with this incredibly beautiful and poignant poem! And what a title!

Love,
Margherita
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3 posted 03-02-2010 12:23 AM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Greeneyes - only a romantic heart could write a verse such as this one...

BC
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4 posted 03-06-2010 01:16 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

You leave me just wanting to read again - so I did.  Spell-binding, captivating .. I can't think of words right now to describe what I think of this poem.

It lingers with me and I am going to go and just hold it close for a bit.

A
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5 posted 03-07-2010 05:23 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

nice
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6 posted 03-09-2010 09:56 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

very nicely done, my friend...very prettily done.  Read it more than twice...still wanted more...

j.
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Your style is never boring to read,
so much thought rendered effortlessly.
Jeff
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8 posted 03-10-2010 07:02 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

very lovely, Lauren~~

I miss reading you and that of many others from the past.

M
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9 posted 03-10-2010 08:29 AM       View Profile for Chalmette Guy   Email Chalmette Guy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chalmette Guy

Everything about this is amazing, from the presentation to the imagery.
I love this and would be so happy if someone wrote like this for me.

Great poetry here.
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10 posted 03-10-2010 11:44 AM       View Profile for Edder   Email Edder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Edder

You paint a breathless image, Lauren. Well done.
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11 posted 03-10-2010 08:14 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice...James
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Lady L~ My sister, as always and ever you touch my heart.  

Reading you again is like that first breath of spring air...and I exhale slowly as I try to hold it all in for just a moment longer.

Love this, love you.  ~D
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It seems far too long since I last
read one of your wonderful poems,
Lauren...

and I'm glad this met my eyes today.



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14 posted 03-12-2010 08:56 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Interesting ramble, Lauren. I don't think it was as cohesive as it could have been (a tad too much time on presentation that took away from content), but the title is brilliant! Nice to read you again.

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simply exquisite!

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As always I love your imagery, form and presentation.  Your poetry is always so ethereal, surreal and romantic.

I especially love these lines:
"for how I feel touching you
when I am out of touch.

a temple of times rebirth me in
one breath.

falling snow still touches me --

softly remembering I
belong to you  for
the last dance"

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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17 posted 03-14-2010 05:49 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

nicely wriiten
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18 posted 03-14-2010 06:10 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Lovely flow of emotions from peaks to serenity.

Excellent choice of words and phrases.

I guess you won't be able to save the last dance for me??

Eric
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Nicely done, your feelings are deep and romantic.  I liked it.

Billie Cullimore  
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20 posted 03-14-2010 09:55 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

It's not that I am eager to argue with Christopher (although he'd argue that) I particularly enjoyed the presentation. But I am biased toward a long lost poet that did those spacings so precisely that I found myself in the silences.

So yes, I did love this, particularly the spaces between phrases and words--like watching snow falling slow. (I typed that like I KNOW, huh?)  



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21 posted 07-08-2010 10:29 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

I'll disagree with Christopher... :-)

it was a pleasure to find this and to read again the unique way you have with words and presentation...
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Lady L....your penswish is always different which makes it a pleasure to read..the depth of where you speak is a favorite place for me to spend time.
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"left here, glancing round, above, beneath
the oceans scene
a temple of times     rebirth me in
one breath"

astoundingly beautiful!  
It's great to read your writing once again,
Greeneyes.

           ~miscellanea
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i think this is very lovely.
 
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