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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2010-02-23 10:13 PM

When I was young, I had a crush,
...on the girl next door,
I tried and tried, to write a poem,
...to win my heart's adore.
A rhyming little ditty,
...as cute as cute can be,
To let my secret sweetheart,
...know what she meant to me.
I never wrote that poem,
...the rhyme was just not there,
And so I lost my first true love,
...the girl with light brown hair.
In my quest I was defeated,
...my poem never written,
About dear Gertrude Finkelberg,
...with whom I once was smitten.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2010-02-25 06:02 PM

This is very cute ... I might read it to my friend who happens to have the same beautiful name as your first love Gertrude.

Now she would be proud of you of course.

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2010-02-28 04:02 PM

What a cute poem, Tim. I hope Gertrude reads it.
Ida

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2010-02-28 09:19 PM

I do believe that Spring has sprung
to those of who were smitten...
to yesterdays of youthful smug
and those who now we are a'missin'!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

4 posted 2010-04-04 06:40 AM

This is so cute Tim!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2010-04-05 12:35 PM

Nice...sometimes words face to face will suffice...James

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

6 posted 2010-04-05 02:06 AM

Smitten, love-bug bitten, and tongue-tied... all perils of an unforgettable first crush! And I am transported back to the 7th grade, when I feel head over heels for a sleepy-eyed boy named Dane. I only got up the courage to speak to him once, to ask for a picture, and then I fled after I got it in my hot little hands. I think I still have it somewhere among my old photos. I wonder what became of him.

[This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (04-05-2010 04:41 PM).]

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

7 posted 2010-04-08 12:37 PM

That is quite a touching little poem Tim

A real pleasure to read. much enjoyed.

Lindsay

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

8 posted 2010-04-08 03:46 PM

Awhile ago, I wrote one with the same title. Thought you might enjoy it...

First Love

There once was a lady from Penniman
Who taught first grade, and then again
At Christmas I missed her, while she gained a Mister
She shattered my heart and then some.

‘Tis my story, sad but true
of the one that got away
for never would my heart beat anew
after that sad, fateful day.

No others could make my heart feel alive
for unlike some, dear friend, I was only five!

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

9 posted 2010-04-08 06:51 PM

The poem may have been a challenge, especially if you intended to put her name in?..LOL....it rhymed great here...enjoyed the read..thank you..

Goldenrose.

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