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threadbear
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0 posted 2010-02-23 05:17 PM


Papoose

looking down at his embryo eyes
with her eyes of ambers
he squirmed in his blue papoose
until a foot the size of a toe
popped out
and wiggled.
nonstop

She tucked his head beneath her chin
pulling on his sock with one hand
steadying his leg with the other
and somehow maintaining harmonious balance
savoring baby skin
with its godlike fresh scent.
Upon his head was a sun carpet of red
sparse still
like it needs watering.

and when the world got too serious
and people stopped to gaze at the beautiful child
a simple coo
was all it took
to melt all sorrows


(c)2010 jeff feezle / ShadowRider

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Salad Soldiers

Two hundred solid salad soldiers
Watching, waiting to hear the old line
Rangers, Mounties sitting in Chryslers
At midnite hiding behind neon signs.

There’s anticipation in crowded rooms
Where spent smoke curls out slitted glass
& cards dealt face up to beautiful losers
Dressed to impress, styled to maximum class.

Some other day when invitations are stale
And your friends can’t remember your name
The car won’t start, you woke up late
And you get plenty tired of playing this game.

So you lock your bedroom door, latch your heart
The hallways sit unexplored in internal fires
The jungle is inside, there’s just no place to hide
All the truth poets have been proven to be liars.

Life and their rollover minutes go past so fast
There’s a dent in your forehead from pounding your fist
And you wonder where all past loves must go
And if you’re ever really missed.

Somewhere on a rumpled bed sheet
Is some-who that does
Remembering those gambles you’ve made
And if you’re lucky, though you’ll never know
There’s a tear somewhere
Falling down soul-stairs
Sliding down cheek to chin

And it’s here that you listen
And it’s here that you comprehend
And for all your self-born politics
And for all your sad regrets
That you’ve been loved
Many times over
And it’s time to collect the bets.



8/18/09  Jeff Feezle/ ShadowRider

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© Copyright 2010 Jeff Feezle - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2010-02-23 06:02 PM


Jeff I loved them both~~
How could you not be touched by "Papoose"


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threadbear
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2 posted 2010-02-23 10:55 PM


Aw, thank you, Maur.
Miss ya, kiddo: hope you are feeling better.  
We have a water backup in our basement right now; where my office is.  They're coming to dig it out tomorrow.  Big bucks!
~practicing grrrs under my breath~
Thanks again, and stay warm, Maur,
Jeff

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2010-02-24 06:21 AM


Our street is having a sewer replaced which will take a week or two and we are expecting another snowstorm tonight into tomorrow...
ughh! 6-12 inches (or more)

I am making it okay through most of the day teaching but on that ride home and all night long this "thing" I have is draining me and I mean that literally! The only comfort I have is that I know many others suffering too because of this dry weather and  until Spring and moist air is in the offering I guess we continue to cough and choke on Winter!


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Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2010-02-24 01:29 PM


Yo Jeff,

I understood the first poem posted here, however the second one was way beyond me.

I'd suggest one poem at a time.  Of course that's only me.

Bobby

threadbear
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5 posted 2010-02-24 02:44 PM


Hey, Bobby!

Thank you for your kind words.  The second poem is actually an ode or a song.  It was inspired by a former supervisor I had that spent two days crying at her desk about not being to get a dress for her daughter at the mall.  At the time, my wife had cancer, and I thought: Geez Boss: is this ALL you have to worry about?  It bothered me that we worry too much about stupid things, and get all worked up about it.

The poem itself describes the many trials an Everyman/Woman faces, and how many of them are Internal Fires, self-caused stress, or over-emphasized personal troubles.  There are plenty of ways we can get tripped up: lots of 'sheriffs behind billboards'.  In the end, it will always be up to the person to match their dreams up with reality.  Try rereading this, with this in mind, and see if the lines don't come together a bit better.  I know: my work often gives the reader a heachache.  *smile*
Jeff


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