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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2010-02-23 10:42 AM




some afternoon colored morning
residue of sun lipstick on cloud collar
and a gull sips her water fountain whiskey

I wonder if she counts the coins
from dreaming children in grown up bodies
that emptied their hands as souls there

or is she only sees the shining objects
and whispers they are pretty things
perhaps gifts from the gods distantly tossed

to tempt her to wish she was as the fish
that swim under shimmer sided windows
in their round walled heistation

but without answering she wings into tomorrow


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daark (velvet water series)


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1 posted 2010-02-23 10:49 AM


The way that you render your thoughts to pen is a delightful treat to behold Dark.

Always, it is a pleasure to find your words here.

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2010-02-23 11:27 AM


ms gs...thanks lady friend
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3 posted 2010-02-23 07:48 PM


Glassine poetry is at its finest
whenever under your hand, sir.

The only sad part is that the author
might not acknowledge all of the sighs...

unless he's on the other side.

Well done...and of course, enjoyed.


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4 posted 2010-02-23 08:12 PM


beautiful, just beautiful thats all I cay say.

Zeitgeist.

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5 posted 2010-02-25 07:14 AM


Awesome, dear D.! You bless us with outstanding, true poetry, to sip at in pure delight.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2010-02-25 04:58 PM


Ms sun...thank you special lady

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Zeig...thanks so much


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ms Mar, thank you lady friend

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7 posted 2010-02-25 05:55 PM


wow! how beautiful...

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Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2010-02-25 06:56 PM


Lady L...thanks so much !!
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9 posted 2010-02-28 12:31 PM


This is beautiful.  I bet she wishes she was the fish.  That's where I lay my money.

A

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2010-02-28 07:02 AM


ms ali-san..I think the gull I spoke of just wants to eat the fish...she seems perfectly content with her wings...but then again she don't ride a harley so...

thanks babe

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11 posted 2010-02-28 03:42 PM


Maybe she wanted to eat the fish so she could be the fish? I refuse to admit that I misread the poem - I would rather contend that I read it from my own slant of thought.  Or something like that.

A

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