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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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0 posted 2010-02-23 12:05 PM


Inspiration in the air
Musical notes and keys just everywhere
Felt the sun on my scalp
My bald fade fresh
I saw my girl walking away from me
Yeah, I saw my girl walking right down the street
I knew it was because my spirit I just can't beat
Let it burn
Cried the Saints
It must be fire
But I got no complaints
I'm just lovin' this New Orleans air
Gonna ride my bike down
To listen to the musical notes
That are everywhere

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1 posted 2010-02-23 02:44 PM


I envy you - I have been trying to figure out a time and way to get there over the past two years and could not succeed.  I finally decided okay going to see those "Saints come marching home," and could not get one flight from here.  Another time, but yes, I can "feel" New Orleans calling me too.

Nicely done.

Chalmette Guy
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2 posted 2010-02-23 03:18 PM


You captured my attention for sure...the home of my birth, my home sweet home I miss so much.

You made me able to see, hear, and yes smell it all right now.

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3 posted 2010-02-27 11:31 PM


Zach,

I like this  -  I wanted to be there.  I also liked the repetition.  This read like a song to me.

A

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4 posted 2010-03-01 11:49 PM


Thank you all for your responses. I haven't been able to check for awhile, so sorry for the delay.
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