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Open Poetry #46

Fate? Dream not.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2010-02-14 11:37 PM

Fate? Dream not.

I feel dry snow
Burn my skin

Finitely,
The arid air
Freezes the moisture
So the frozen snow
Will materialize,
While the sun blazes
Its cold and dejected
Light from a distance.

This thirst,
I cannot quench

For water
Evaporates
On my tongue

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Juju (02-15-2010 01:59 PM).]

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

1 posted 2010-02-15 12:00 PM

What a great theme Juju, like being in an ocean you cannot drink, being around so much of anything that you just have no access to.

Loved this!

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

2 posted 2010-02-15 12:22 PM

I'm pretty sure

I was actually thirsty.

You write amazing poetry. Fact.

P

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

3 posted 2010-02-15 01:43 AM

You wrote in a wonderful way a metaphor of the desire with a gorgeous theme above snow, this is great and so well expressed.

regards

yann

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2010-02-15 10:18 AM

good description!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2010-02-16 07:09 PM

Nice...James

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

6 posted 2010-02-18 08:03 PM

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Very good Juju

John

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Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

7 posted 2010-02-18 08:31 PM

Yo dear Juju,

This sounds pretty serious. However, that's the way it is for the unlucky ones.

Love Bobby

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2010-02-18 09:59 PM

Juju - your writings I find are always with much meaning, very nicely done...

BC

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