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viking_metal
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0 posted 2010-02-12 03:48 AM


you spoke in speech bubbles
words fluttering from your mouth
they floated right to me
like seeds from some dandelion
rooted in kindness and watered with love

you spoke in speech bubbles
they floated right over my head
pushed towards me by beautiful wind
that was your sigh of breath
washing back and forth like a tide

those bubbles hued with wonder
stemming from your eyes
they popped and clapped
clapped like thunder
right over my head.

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I wrote this in my head about.... 15 hours ago, I know this isn't exactly how I wrote it. This is okay, though.


Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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Margherita
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1 posted 2010-02-12 08:36 AM


Extraordinary, dear Paul!

You may have written it even better in your head, but what you kept in mind and shared is the very best and most beautiful that I have seen from your pen. Wow! Amazing in its loveliness.

Love,
Margopargo

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2 posted 2010-02-12 09:06 AM


"you spoke in speech bubbles
words fluttering from your mouth
they floated right to me"


diggin it Paul

viking_metal
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3 posted 2010-02-12 10:44 AM


Margopargo, you flatter me, and I love you for it. Thank you mademoiselle.

Suesea, love, thank you.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2010-02-13 03:37 PM


Yo Paul,

This is a good concept.  Speech bubbles floating like seeds from a dandelion.

Bobby


viking_metal
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5 posted 2010-02-13 05:57 PM


Thanks broseidon.


Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Bill Charles
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6 posted 2010-02-13 11:17 PM


viking_metal - indeed, it's not only ok, it's great. Liked this a lot...

BC

viking_metal
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7 posted 2010-02-14 12:51 PM


Thanks sir, you do me an honor by even reading it. I appreciate the kind words, however undeserved.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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