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ctowen
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since 2001-10-18
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Green Mountains of VT

0 posted 2010-02-11 10:48 PM



outward

  from within
reachable depth
obtainable horizons
  even and through
the greyest of forecasts

well wishing

  where pennies
have no thought
and angels fall
  winged

an emotional ballad
  from silent perch
to heaven's floor

forward

  carrying
like the very wind
of its breathless call
  straight and true
here and now, and long passed

sky to water

  aching rain
the tearing of souls
unsuspecting
  tumbling loss
at a blink of an eye

droughted

© Copyright 2010 C. Thomas Owen - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2010-02-12 08:25 AM


Once wasn't enough, read it twice, because I felt captured within your words and emotions.

I think I will go and read it again ...

It's a gem.

Love,
Margherita

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
2 posted 2010-02-13 09:04 PM


Trying to catch life and love as it slips through your hand. I felt the heavy weightlessness and the light thud all at once
Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
3 posted 2010-02-13 11:19 PM


ctowen - I also read it twice, and it was within as I did. Nice write...

BC

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
4 posted 2010-06-14 07:53 PM


carrying
like the very wind
of its breathless call
  straight and true
here and now, and long passed

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Sadly beautiful~ CT~

*Hug*

SlowlyFallAway
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since 2008-08-29
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North Carolina
5 posted 2010-06-14 10:22 PM


This was deep... Deeper than any reply I could write. Amazing.
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6 posted 2010-06-16 01:14 AM


You know, this poem like riding on the trail of a thought.  I get lost among the words and just sit back and enjoy the air as I breathe?  Does that make sense to you, my friend?

I hope so because I really like this poem.

A

Bastet
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since 2010-05-07
Posts 246

7 posted 2010-06-16 02:43 AM


I love the economy of this poem. It's as if you stuffed a carry-on bag with the emotional content of a trunk. And it works beautifully! Wish I could do it.
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
8 posted 2010-06-16 06:34 AM


SMiling at Bastet's reply...yes, stuffed a carry on with a trunk's worth of awesome!
I love the title...and would enjoy the fleshing out of your last line.  I think there is more to be said there.


bel1e
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since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631

9 posted 2010-06-18 06:29 PM


ohhh~  loving the depths~~very nicely written~

      

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