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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2010-02-11 06:50 AM



I am cold beneath my clothes.
I feel the ice within my bones--
I shiver, shrinking nippled domes;

I am cold beneath my clothes
as my tears run hot in those

rivers

running reds, my nose,
ungraciously
in dread, composed

in chartreuse
as hooks suppose

nature

supernaturally:

I am so cold beneath my clothes--

waiting for the hook's complaint

bobbing twice in testament

that once a fish was there...

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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
1 posted 2010-02-11 11:17 PM


you ARE
STILL
one of the best
writers
i have EVER read

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2010-02-12 12:48 PM


And YOU

are still

my hero.

I'll love you forever Helen.

Mysteria
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3 posted 2010-02-12 12:49 PM


Yup listen to her!
miscellanea
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OH
4 posted 2010-02-12 08:03 AM


Serenity,

    I'll second the emotion.  You're poetry is astonishing!  

misce  

Margherita
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Eternity
5 posted 2010-02-12 08:21 AM


I love this flow of poetry born from the cold ...

Always a treat to read you!

Love,
Margherita

JL
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since 2004-04-01
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Texas, USA
6 posted 2010-02-14 05:43 PM


Nice.

JL


The Lady
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7 posted 2010-02-17 11:47 PM




I agree! Astonishing is the word!


Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
8 posted 2010-02-18 12:00 PM


serenity blaze - so much depth in your writing, stunning...

BC

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
9 posted 2010-02-18 09:47 AM


I was wondering about the title, so I clicked seeing it was you that wrote it

and all I can say is Wow!

Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11
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10 posted 2010-02-18 09:59 AM


You are always amazing in that when I read you, I have to re-read over and over and the meanings become ever the more deeper to me.
What can I say? My words are not worthy.

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