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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-02-11 01:52 AM




You left the room
and I noticed my heart
beating sand and stone skinned drums.
My breath felt full of air,
my air felt full of oxygen,
and you sent the whole lot
whistling over glass bottle mouths.

The chemicals in my body
pretended I was falling from the sky
and I allowed them that lie
because it felt good to be alive again.

____________________________________
Leaf, Overturned. (series.)


Paul


Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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1 posted 2010-02-11 08:13 PM


you. rock. my. socks.
viking_metal
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2 posted 2010-02-11 10:45 PM


Wow. Thanks.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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Member Rara Avis
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4 posted 2010-02-15 03:35 AM


Paul,

I am glad that you are here.  I have missed reading your poetry.

A

viking_metal
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5 posted 2010-02-15 09:17 AM


Alaboo, dearest Alaboo, thank you. You're a sweetheart.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Earl Brinkman
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6 posted 2010-08-10 09:45 PM


I love the line `my breath felt full of air and my air felt full of oxygen.  Nice.
Andrew Scott
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7 posted 2010-08-10 10:27 PM


Most Excellent!

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Bill Charles
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8 posted 2010-08-12 12:23 PM


viking_metal - you dig deep, and it comes out well in your words. Nice write...

BC

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