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When Talking Is Too Much Trouble
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When Talking Is Too Much Trouble |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy 
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When Talking Is Too Much Trouble This multi-colored box is being inspected like it is a rare diamond Another gentleman straining his neck to see which app is running on his friend's device bubbled together not anywhere at that moment, really, lost in the timeless expanse of micro-circuitry and whims. I pass a woman: driving, talking, and texting and wonder how much longer she has. period. I put a lane between us. Almost to a child each student is walking up school sidewalks fixated at their upturned hands in some neo-modern palm reading regimen ?What are they gaining from this same repeated almost robotical behavior and they're not even aware they are indulging every fancy they could dream up a cake of all icing Even without talking their clicking screams: the sound of a thousand ant mandibles I realize how quickly speech is becomig obsolete and I make note of this in my Blackberry diary. 1/27/2010 Jeff Feezle |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOLOL! Love it!  |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Thanks, Mike! I need to say here, that I borrowed the title of this poem from a Climax Blues Band song of same title from the 1972 'Shine On' album (which has never been available in CD format for some goofy reason.) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You know Jeff, I have the same feelings only I won't be getting a Blackberry or even a cell phone that does anything other than make and receive calls. It really gets to me to be in the grocery store and either hear someone's complete what should be a private conversation that I don't really want to hear as they shop, or hear them going down each food aisle talking about what they are buying to someone on the other end. I guess everyone wants to feel important today. Or every time I see someone stopped at the corner they are always on the cell phone the moment they get in their car. Don't they ever use it when in the home instead? Just griping~~ M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I can't say I love it, but I did enjoy it. Um, why the spacings? |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
I put a lane between myself and them. I text and call, but I hate how attached people are to their phones. My mother worries sick if she calls me and I don't answer for three or four days. Ten or fifteen years ago nobody would have thought anything of it. We're all too attached, I say.  Good write, sir, good write indeed. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Hi, Maur and thanks so much for putting up with my poetry attitudes! LOL This thing was inspired by a video I saw of a bunch of Japanese kids at a Miley Cyrus concert in Tokyo. EVERY ONE of them had their arm outstretched, trying to video tape the concert with their cell phone. Enjoying the concert isn't good enough anymore? They have to live thru mechanization even at a LIVE concert? Craaaazy, huh? Getting warmer by the hour here, Jeff |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Hi, Serenity, and it's a great question. I was a bit caustic when I wrote this...sorry about that. Why the indentations? I'm using a self-developed technique that I called 'parethntical emphasis.' The first line is the 'subject line'- the following lines are only related to the first line, and are sub-files, each line being it's own description of the first line. The closing line of each paragraph 'closes' the thought, therefore it is not indented. Non-indented lines are thoughts that can stand on their own. This whole process takes alot of thought, actually, although it probably looks pretty weird. This style is patterened after news articles: the first paragraph is the main subject summary, succeeding lines are description that should answer: Who, What, When , Why. It's meant to be indented as a specific reading style, which pauses on the indentation phrases, and no pauses when the phrase is not indented. If you read it out loud, you will kinda get what I mean. I know...this is waaaaaaay more info than you needed! Thanks for your question, Jeff |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Hey, Vikes! oh heck yes, I agree totally! I don't personally own a Blackberry, but it made for a good line anyway! Thanks for the input, Vike, Jeff |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Jeff, Which modern poets do you read? Bob Kaven |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Bob, thx for the Q, sorry for the delay, cleaning the house corner to corner: billy collins, sylvia plath, dylan thomas- fav modern poets ray bradbury, mark twain, rudyard kipling, - fav authors I get style lessons from keats, shelley, hawthorne- favorite old-style poets |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
threadbear - all this texting is unreal, what do people have that's so interesting to talk about with their fingers. Geez, if one want to converse with someone just call them on the phone... BC |
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