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viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-02-09 05:42 PM

Your mouth spun webs of strings
tying my eyes to yours
and gently forcing me to my feet.

You smiled and your teeth were flawless.
you were quirky, imperfect, and wonderful
with your love of dissecting things
and the way you sometimes read aloud.

Your laugh weaved webs,
from technicolor strings
perfectly designed to catch my thoughts
as they fell from my head.

Your fingertips brushed mine
twice in six seconds or so
and you didn't pull away or rearrange
the social building blocks between us.

We were told to close our eyes
all I could see
was your hand in mine.

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A New Leaf. (new series. Bad habits has been closed down.)

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2010-02-09 06:51 PM

this feels so familiar...have I read this one before? maybe it just reminds me of another one of yours...

really love this one Paul.

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

2 posted 2010-02-09 10:47 PM

I wrote it ten minutes before work. no you haven't.

I guess all my poems are ze same

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2010-02-10 04:32 AM

quote:
We were told to close our eyes
all I could see
was your hand in mine.

Beautiful, intense conclusion, to a great write, dear Paul.

Science is fascinating isn't it?

... and human emotions are part of it.

No, don't pout, your poems are not all the same!!!

You are very good.

Love,
Margherita

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

4 posted 2010-02-10 04:50 AM

Well thought and written,
loved the ending!

~ARH

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

5 posted 2010-02-10 10:10 AM

Margopargo, thank you so very much.

Love is interesting, at the very least.

ARH... Thank you, mademoiselle.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2010-02-15 02:19 AM

Paul,

I like how you play string games - and I like your style.

A

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

7 posted 2010-02-15 09:16 AM

Thanks so much, dearest Alaboo.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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