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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2010-02-09 05:26 AM




I Did Not Write This Verse

I did not write this verse as well as
It has written me
It leaped ahead of all my thoughts
In utter jubilee

Unleashed the contents of my heart
And tears I’ve not yet wept
Aroused the corners dark and safe
Where my dear secret slept

I did not want him yet to know
How great the love I feel
That cruelly would a verse as this
Unravel and unseal

So unprepared was I to face
Whatever be my fate
I chose to take my pen in hand
And now it is too late


Elizabeth Santos


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Chalmette Guy
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1 posted 2010-02-09 12:43 PM


This was a masterful poem.
I love it.


And these lines are my favorite.

Unleashed the contents of my heart
And tears I’ve not yet wept
Aroused the corners dark and safe
Where my dear secret slept


But the ending comes together so nicely with the beginning.
Perfect.

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2 posted 2010-02-09 01:18 PM


At the risk of telling secrets, I have seen you go to the lady's room, and come out with a "perfect sonnet!"  I am not at all surprised that your muse just grabs you by the brain, and you both run with it!     Love ya.

Admit it you laughed right?  Right?

Martie
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3 posted 2010-02-09 04:37 PM


Liz...I love the way you play with your muse and your muse plays with you!  I love this poem, and you!!
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4 posted 2010-02-15 01:57 AM


I always know I am going to get the 'full meal poetry deal' with your poetry, Liz.  I learn a lot and enjoy your contributions greatly.

Alison

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5 posted 2010-02-15 10:28 AM


I love this!
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6 posted 2010-02-15 06:34 PM


Magnifique!!  Very well done Liz...
Robert E. Jordan
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7 posted 2010-02-15 06:58 PM


Yo dear Elizabeth,

This is a good poem.  We do sometimes hurt ourselves by what we write.

Love Bobby

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