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Her Faith

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Zeigeist
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0 posted 01-25-2010 09:41 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Zeigeist

Her Faith

It was, I guess,
A matter of trust.
Faith is such a thin line
For lives to hang on.
Her eyes saw only
The best in me.
I gave her only the worst.
Effort was enough to
Make it last for a few years.
Finally,the inertia slowed and
it ran its course.

The ghosts of us  
Still haunt my life,
More powerful in the aftermath
And having more of an impact now
Then ever when it was real.

Her faith,
too thin a line
to hang a love on.

Zeitgeist

[This message has been edited by Zeigeist (01-26-2010 05:45 PM).]

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 01-26-2010 09:56 AM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Powerful write.
Consider editing your last line for impact,
..."Too thin a line
to hang a love on".
This is awesome!
A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 01-26-2010 10:58 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I can see the love "hanging" on the line...great poem!
Zeigeist
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3 posted 01-26-2010 05:47 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Thanks TD,
For your praise and your advice.

Zeitgeist
Zeigeist
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4 posted 01-26-2010 05:49 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

Thanks RH,
for your kind words.

Zeitgeist
faithmairee
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5 posted 01-05-2011 06:07 PM       View Profile for faithmairee   Email faithmairee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit faithmairee's Home Page   View IP for faithmairee

very nicely written...i like everything about this poem...nothing to fault!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

faithmairee
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6 posted 01-05-2011 06:09 PM       View Profile for faithmairee   Email faithmairee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit faithmairee's Home Page   View IP for faithmairee

i like your style and am looking forward to reading more of your work

There must be a poem in here somewhere.
 
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