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Open Poetry #46

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SilhouetteMarquis
Junior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 32

0 posted 2010-01-24 11:17 PM

The Sun that shone forever
-Until it didn't-
led lovers through endeavors man-made
And through the mad man's mane
The heartless mind
And soulless body
Let down their dreams
In the bed of undying posies.

There's a revolution going on, they say
Brother upon brother
Upon sister, upon brother
Below all sycamores, resides a shadow
Where all the timid beings are born
In absence of the Sun.

They say lovers could see at night
-Perhaps they shouldn't-
They would rather pick out a basket of roses
Something nice.
Bitter floral aftertastes linger
Can you hear the crimson echo?
The source of it died nicely
A vase, rather than a basket.

There's a solution to be salved, they say
Wound upon warrior
Upon his garish mount.
The laurel wreath,
Not quite as victorious,
Could not be maligned by the purpose
Of a flower in the sky.

GBride
Senior Member

since 2009-07-02

Posts 538

1 posted 2010-01-28 08:28 PM

Lovely!
Much vivid imagery.
You have a talent!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2010-01-29 06:07 PM

Enjoyed...James

wicked
Junior Member

since 2010-01-29

Posts 22
Florida, USA

3 posted 2010-01-30 07:43 PM

AMAZING.

one word says it all.

I am that I am,
And that makes it me.
I float like a rock
But I sting like a bee.

noman
Junior Member

since 2009-12-26

Posts 18

4 posted 2010-01-31 04:47 AM

This is very good.

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