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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2010-01-16 03:00 AM


Surrounded by boxes and just...
mess

so just want to throw my sox in my bag
and just
go...

start this journey, months in the planning
to come down to a few days
throwing the plan out the window
left with some ideas

on where to go
what to see
hearing the train whistle
outside my window

taking weeks to find the "perfect" room
going with...
location location location

all these destinations
are cold

but, oh
oh

the German receptionist...
"Yah Yah, Mitte Smit"
"See jou on dee 22nd"

mmmmm
just ready to...
go

[This message has been edited by martiniat8 (01-16-2010 05:08 AM).]

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Kielo
Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109

1 posted 2010-01-16 04:39 AM


I like the way you've broken out this piece,
"and just
go..."
One word lines are not used often enough, I think. They carry so much weight. Love this poem.

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