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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2010-01-08 03:31 AM


Alison did it, thought I'd try.

To me now, from me then.
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Stop and breathe
the grass is still green-
Hold your breath in those big lungs
and taste the spring.

When did you forget?
Love is simple.

You can even drive now,
wow! This jeep is fun.
No roof or doors to hold us in.

You're a real live uncle
like uncle rick
or uncle chad.

You've got your very own dog!
He loves to play in the snow,
just like I do.

You're so strong now
from lifting all that stuff.
You should pick up your heart
and carry it home.
______________________________________
Lame.
Paul


Fall in love early, fall in love often.

© Copyright 2010 Paul Weisbrod - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
1 posted 2010-01-08 08:00 AM


Not Lame!  Perfect!!
SEA
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with you
2 posted 2010-01-08 12:58 PM


Lame?! are you kidding me?!

it's awesome just like you

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
3 posted 2010-01-08 02:54 PM


Thanks TD.


Sea, my dear Sea, you are always far too kind.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28
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Oregon
4 posted 2010-01-09 03:34 AM


Home is where you hang your hat
or so I have been told
but I, too, like to think
the heart makes love unfold

When I read how strong you are
and in that jeep you roam!
a smile slips across my lips 'cause
your heart always brings you home


I liked your poem very much...so full of life!



viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
5 posted 2010-01-10 02:41 AM


Thanks Klassy,


I liked yours very much as well.


You're far too kind, and I appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

passing shadows
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6 posted 2010-01-10 01:56 PM


love is simple, yes

nice one here

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
7 posted 2010-01-10 10:06 PM


Thanks so very much, PS.

And P.S. --- Thanks for reading and commenting on all my poems. You're a shiny penny, you are.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03
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Osaka, Japan
8 posted 2010-06-17 03:24 AM


I would not call this work lame.  It is from the heart and it is you.  You gave a little of yourself to us and we are grateful.
Alison
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9 posted 2010-06-17 03:30 AM


You make me smile, Paul.

xoxoxo
Ali

bel1e
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10 posted 2010-06-17 01:37 PM


Ohhh....very nicely done!

      

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
11 posted 2010-06-17 07:24 PM


Resurrecting an old piece, ay? Thank you, all three of you. Thank you very much.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Boshii2
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since 2009-02-01
Posts 146

12 posted 2010-06-19 11:13 PM


nostalgia in each line

lost in my own now
thank you
kind regards Boshii2

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
13 posted 2010-06-20 12:45 PM


viking_metal - you write well...

BC

whisperingwalt
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Coquitlam, BC, Canada
14 posted 2010-06-20 09:32 PM


This was a unique perspective and you shared a side of you with everyone....Once in awhile we just need to sit comfortable with the thought that we are incredible and that the hurt and insecure part of ourselves is no longer who we are...keep up the good work.ww
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