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Father
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since 2009-12-15
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Confusion

0 posted 2010-01-07 10:10 PM


‘Neath the blanket of night
I lay staring at the stars

How bright in the cold air;
How lonely seems the sky.

Breathing deep, I think of you;
And remember.


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DonRodrigue
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since 2010-01-07
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1 posted 2010-01-07 10:14 PM


Short, the use of the words were really moving. Thanks.
Father
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Confusion
2 posted 2010-02-03 06:18 PM


Thank you DonRodrigue, I tried to paint the largest picture possible with the fewest words while retaining the emotional impact as well.


Honeybee
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3 posted 2010-03-15 11:37 PM


Short, yet to the point and most effective....beautiful and very powerful!
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