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Open Poetry #46
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Snowflake From Hell
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since 2003-07-10
Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion
0 posted 2010-01-03 10:39 PM

Dancing with the Devil,
Keep your focus level,
Running in the pail moonlight,
Drifting further from reality's sight.
Because we're cut, dried, microwaved,
Safe in the knowledge we'll all be saved.
Caught in a landslide of memories and dreams,
Tumblin' down in unheard screams,
Carry a smile broken in two,
Upside down and blue,
Because I'm cut, dried, microwaved,
Safe in the knowledge that I won't be saved.
Emotions failing intense,
Impailed on rod iron fence,
Because we're cut, dried, microwaved,
Safe in the knowledge we'll all be saved.
Dance with the Devil in the pail moonlight,
Falling further and further from reality's sight.
Because we're cut, dried, microwaved,
Safe in the knowledge no one will be saved.
Tumblin' down,
(cut)
Carry a broken smile,
(dried)
Dancing with the Devil.
(microwaved)
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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2010-01-05 12:11 PM

Dear Snowflake, this read like a nightmare in Hell!

Powerful! Kinda chant-like!

Perhaps a dance in the sunshine might make you sleep better at night!

Hi, Kyle! It's been awhile! I hope that 2010 proves to be a fabulous year for you!


EA
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2010-01-05 09:16 AM

Hiya Kyle. good to read you again
Father
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since 2009-12-15
Posts 58
Confusion
3 posted 2010-01-07 09:48 PM

This is quite different from what I normally gravitate to but I must say that it was also refreshing in that it was just that good.
Bravo!
kindredspirit
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since 2009-05-19
Posts 156
4 posted 2010-01-12 12:31 PM

This is rather intriguing, and I enjoyed your use of the word "microwaved".
You write outside of the box
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5 posted 2010-01-12 03:01 PM

I love "some" rap and this read like a good rap to me.  Enjoyed it.
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