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A Simple Sonnet

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Michael
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A Simple Sonnet

  
If I knew Iambic Pentameter,
Then I could write simple sonnets for her...
But men like me, alas, born deaf to tone
Are ever condemned to sing all alone.

If I just knew where to stress inflection,
My songs then might border on perfection...
But lost to ev'ry stammer and stutter,
I'll ne'er sing anywhere but this gutter.

If my pen were magic, ah then maybe
I could steal her heart, make her mi-lady...
Then whisper sweet nothings soft to the ear,
And pluck the heartstrings, easing forth a tear.

The world then might see me a famous bard,
Ah, but let's face it, man, sonnets are hard.


Michael Anderson

1/20/2012
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Naw, actually they are not hard, Michael, uh, unless you get all involved with those Iambic Pentameters and ll the rest of the Shakespeare stuff . . . Uh, oh, I see your point. Yes, they are hard if done correctly. I enjoyed this one, and since I don't know enough about the damn things I'll just say I'm smiling.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

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*laughing*

Y'made me log in...

I didn't forget. It's just that sonnets ARE hard.



*shaking my head*

If I ever try to write again, it'll be a sonnet. (I've just been feeding my fake fish on facebook...)

Those Shakesperian peops tawked funny anyways...
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Tis true those sonnet thingy-bobs are hard
Sometimes I wish I had the guts or nerve
To follow in the footsteps of the bard
And rattle off a verse with voice and verve

Alas enthusiasm ain't enough
Apparently you also  need some skill
To make the tune sing true which is quite tough
For someone such as I with broken quill

Mad dreams perhaps a hope beyond forlorn
To someday pen a verse that sounds so sweet
In perfect pentameter snipped and shorn
Which fits the beats in simple measured feet

So Michael i just thought I'd let you know
You're a braver man than I to have a go.


Thanks for the chance to read and reply.
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4 posted 01-20-2012 08:56 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

JP, lol... Yeah, I think old fools like me are best left to crying in their beer.  Sonnets... Bah!  :p

Karen, omg, I would have tried to climb Mt. Sonnet months ago if I knew it would draw you out of the wood work.  ((HUGS))  Yeah... You still owe me, whether it's imprisoned in iambic chains, or not.  Don't keep me waiting too long.  

Grinch... My submission was just rejected by the Sonnet of the Month Club.  They said I lost my footing somewhere around line 2.  Care to join me at the Wannabe Sonnet Club?  That's where I'm headed next.     a lovely addition my friend, thank you.

Michael
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5 posted 01-20-2012 09:32 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

/laughing ... this is wonderful.  whimsical and lovely     You are a braver soul than I to try  a sonnet.
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Hard they may be... but this one flows smoothly and is a delight to read! (And THAT isn't a phrase I usually attach to sonnets LOL) But then... anyone who can pen a Gossamer Fandango can write anything... it's all a matter of choice!!! *S* Loved every line! *S*
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Michael, I have no question that your pen "is" purely magical. It flows with a rare beauty that leaves the reader always wanting more. You are a famous bard in all aspects, whether writing sonnets or any other form of rhyme and cadence. MUCH enjoyed, and loved the last line, lol!

Best wishes,
/Kit
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8 posted 01-21-2012 11:17 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Enjoy your words and meaning, my friend - but when it comes to structure of any kind . . . bats see far more than I.  I'm a word slinger not a 'writer', though I do enjoy and envy real word writers - Thought once that I wanted to be one, but my gray matter told me to 'forget it'!

Do read you (and many others) often, and enjoy far more than I reply to...and enjoy slinging a few words myself once in a while,
but "structure" --- beyond me!

More power to you!

j.
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Nicole, this has to be the first time I have ever heard "whimsical" attached to a comment on my poetry... I like it.     will have to tread this minefield more often I suppose.

Ruth...  Haha!  You know this longwinded soul too well.  I usually can't shut up quick enough to keep any of my poetic ponderings down to 14 lines.  Thank you.

Kit, it's so good to see you.  ((Hugs))  you should drop in more often.  I hope all is well with you.... And thank you.  

J., I am of the belief that there are no "rules" when it comes to poetry... Excep that good poetry will "move" the reader emotionally.   I do my best to hold some semblance of rhyme and cadence, but know fullwell I will never fit in the upper echelon of structured poetry, nor would I be comfortable attempting to do so.  That was kind of what I was trying to say in this little wannabe sonnet.... And don't discount your own words so easily.  I am often moved deeply by them.

Thank you all for the kind replies.

Michael

[This message has been edited by Michael (01-21-2012 04:16 PM).]

 
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