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A Simple Sonnet
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A Simple Sonnet |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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A Simple Sonnet If I knew Iambic Pentameter, Then I could write simple sonnets for her... But men like me, alas, born deaf to tone Are ever condemned to sing all alone. If I just knew where to stress inflection, My songs then might border on perfection... But lost to ev'ry stammer and stutter, I'll ne'er sing anywhere but this gutter. If my pen were magic, ah then maybe I could steal her heart, make her mi-lady... Then whisper sweet nothings soft to the ear, And pluck the heartstrings, easing forth a tear. The world then might see me a famous bard, Ah, but let's face it, man, sonnets are hard. Michael Anderson 1/20/2012 |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Naw, actually they are not hard, Michael, uh, unless you get all involved with those Iambic Pentameters and ll the rest of the Shakespeare stuff . . . Uh, oh, I see your point. Yes, they are hard if done correctly. I enjoyed this one, and since I don't know enough about the damn things I'll just say I'm smiling. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*laughing* Y'made me log in... I didn't forget. It's just that sonnets ARE hard.  *shaking my head* If I ever try to write again, it'll be a sonnet. (I've just been feeding my fake fish on facebook...) Those Shakesperian peops tawked funny anyways...  |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
Tis true those sonnet thingy-bobs are hard Sometimes I wish I had the guts or nerve To follow in the footsteps of the bard And rattle off a verse with voice and verve Alas enthusiasm ain't enough Apparently you also need some skill To make the tune sing true which is quite tough For someone such as I with broken quill Mad dreams perhaps a hope beyond forlorn To someday pen a verse that sounds so sweet In perfect pentameter snipped and shorn Which fits the beats in simple measured feet So Michael i just thought I'd let you know You're a braver man than I to have a go. Thanks for the chance to read and reply. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
JP, lol... Yeah, I think old fools like me are best left to crying in their beer. Sonnets... Bah! :p Karen, omg, I would have tried to climb Mt. Sonnet months ago if I knew it would draw you out of the wood work. ((HUGS)) Yeah... You still owe me, whether it's imprisoned in iambic chains, or not. Don't keep me waiting too long.  Grinch... My submission was just rejected by the Sonnet of the Month Club. They said I lost my footing somewhere around line 2. Care to join me at the Wannabe Sonnet Club? That's where I'm headed next. a lovely addition my friend, thank you.Michael |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
/laughing ... this is wonderful. whimsical and lovely You are a braver soul than I to try a sonnet. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hard they may be... but this one flows smoothly and is a delight to read! (And THAT isn't a phrase I usually attach to sonnets LOL) But then... anyone who can pen a Gossamer Fandango can write anything... it's all a matter of choice!!! *S* Loved every line! *S* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Michael, I have no question that your pen "is" purely magical. It flows with a rare beauty that leaves the reader always wanting more. You are a famous bard in all aspects, whether writing sonnets or any other form of rhyme and cadence. MUCH enjoyed, and loved the last line, lol! Best wishes, /Kit |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Enjoy your words and meaning, my friend - but when it comes to structure of any kind . . . bats see far more than I. I'm a word slinger not a 'writer', though I do enjoy and envy real word writers - Thought once that I wanted to be one, but my gray matter told me to 'forget it'! Do read you (and many others) often, and enjoy far more than I reply to...and enjoy slinging a few words myself once in a while, but "structure" --- beyond me! More power to you! j. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Nicole, this has to be the first time I have ever heard "whimsical" attached to a comment on my poetry... I like it. will have to tread this minefield more often I suppose.Ruth... Haha! You know this longwinded soul too well. I usually can't shut up quick enough to keep any of my poetic ponderings down to 14 lines. Thank you. Kit, it's so good to see you. ((Hugs)) you should drop in more often. I hope all is well with you.... And thank you. J., I am of the belief that there are no "rules" when it comes to poetry... Excep that good poetry will "move" the reader emotionally. I do my best to hold some semblance of rhyme and cadence, but know fullwell I will never fit in the upper echelon of structured poetry, nor would I be comfortable attempting to do so. That was kind of what I was trying to say in this little wannabe sonnet.... And don't discount your own words so easily. I am often moved deeply by them. Thank you all for the kind replies. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (01-21-2012 04:16 PM).] |
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