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Friday Night

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roomandboard
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0 posted 01-18-2012 11:35 PM       View Profile for roomandboard   Email roomandboard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for roomandboard

Pool table,
Pool balls, cue stick.

They breed big boys here,
on the western side of an eastern state.
Packed tight into a bar in a corn field that looks like a log cabin
where my cousins go every weekend.
Short hair, loud mouths, imposing stares.
imposing words,
yelling at each other, pressing into us.
Belly up to the bar
running hands through my hair,
looking at your short Daly City breed,
Giants baseball cap,
cute, fat, rosy cheeks
a smile with bad, vampire teeth,
Im bored out of my mind.

Quarter table
Fifty cents on the sidebar.
Name on the chalkboard
Our turn to play the winner.

Smoke fills up the space under the
hanging light above the pool table.
You have stopped paying attention
in order to watch the ball game.
One of the big boys, eyes half shut with drunk,
keeps staring at me.
Brunette desperately looking for a husband
with quick bar banter, and a bad forced laugh,
keeps getting in the way of my stick.

Eight ball, first ball in,
I lose.

A round of tequila shots;
a country song chorus toast.
Last call, coats on,
out into snow flurries, the pickup truck next to us is weaving.
A whole bottle of wine in my belly,
Im running through the apartment,
fighting with you from frustration.
Take me to bed.
Well sleep in tomorrow and have brunch at the diner.

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1 posted 01-18-2012 11:53 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I really like this.  It reminds me of places I have lived.  Welcome to PiP.  Your first poem makes me want to read more of what you have to share.

Alison
roomandboard
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2 posted 01-19-2012 12:06 AM       View Profile for roomandboard   Email roomandboard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for roomandboard

Thanks Alison. I'm happy to be here!
Alison
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3 posted 01-19-2012 02:50 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Me too!

JerryPat2
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4 posted 01-19-2012 06:52 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Oh boy, does THIS bring back some memories. Welcome to PiP, hoe you enjoy your stay here.

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5 posted 01-19-2012 07:52 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Welcome to Passions, R&B! You took us right into the evening with you... I look forward to reading more of your work.
Juju
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6 posted 01-19-2012 10:31 AM       View Profile for Juju   Email Juju   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Juju's Home Page   View IP for Juju

I really like this as well.  I really enjoyed it

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

jwesley
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Texas . . .


7 posted 01-19-2012 11:25 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Very good read, (and feel), my friend, held me to the end, almost perfect end.
j.
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8 posted 01-19-2012 01:11 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Welcome to Passions! A fine introductory
poem/story - well rounded with imagery,
filling the senses...

good job!

Please check your email for a Very
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"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

roomandboard
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9 posted 01-19-2012 01:31 PM       View Profile for roomandboard   Email roomandboard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for roomandboard

Thanks for all the feedback everyone!
tracie66
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10 posted 01-20-2012 03:39 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

great first post - welcome to passions!

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It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

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