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jwesley
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0 posted 2012-01-18 07:48 PM



Weeps In Estascy


Adjacent to my left hand,
yours, on the table,
my skin hot and quivering,
anticipation so strong. . .
my will all but dies

to touch you,

yet I dare not move -

desire . . .
oh, desire
crawls up my spine,
clutches my soul,
squeezes my heart,
pounds in my temples -

Adjacent to my left hand,
your right one moves,
brushes mine . . .

oh my,

oh, my . . .

oh . . . my soul
weeps in ecstasy.



© wesley james beard, jr.
     january 2012


© Copyright 2012 Wesley James Beard, Jr. - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-01-18 07:54 PM


As I was reading this I was thinking about the chemistry which was paramount between myself and my first wife. She was so beautiful I was slightly intimated, and that is how I read this poem. Yes, I can still recall the electricity which surged into my body when our hands touched as we sat talking at her mother's dining table. Beautiful memories, yes, yes, indeed.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

suthern
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2 posted 2012-01-18 08:10 PM


The anticipation... and then the touch... and you know why you live. *S* My heart smiles at your weep of soul! *S*
Amaryllis
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3 posted 2012-01-18 08:14 PM


Powerful...this takes the reader right into the moment!  How those 'small' touches can mean so much....    Enjoyed!

Best,
Amaryllis

Nicole
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4 posted 2012-01-18 08:59 PM


It's absolutely amazing what the simple act of brushing someone's hand can do, isn't it?  Love this my friend.  
Michael
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5 posted 2012-01-18 10:45 PM


I could feel the tingle running up your arm.  Oh my, indeed.  Nicely done.

Michael  

Michael
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6 posted 2012-01-18 10:48 PM


I could feel the tingle running up your arm.  Oh my, indeed.  Nicely done.

Michael  

Alison
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7 posted 2012-01-18 11:08 PM


Such fine writing - I felt it too.  Love this, Jimmy.

A

Margherita
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8 posted 2012-01-19 09:31 AM


You conveyed that breathtaking chemestry of brushing hands so powerfully here, dear Jimmy.

Beautiful!

Margherita

Juju
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9 posted 2012-01-19 10:27 AM


I like this one alot

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

jwesley
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10 posted 2012-01-19 12:32 PM


Jerry - not the first electrical surge I've ever had around women -- now, ater many years of marriage, it's not exactlty a surge, but an everlasting current…

suthern - Thank you my friend, for the awesome light of your smile . I bask in its glow.

Amaryllis - That you would feel it, brings life to the words. Thank you.

Nicole - It, is, isn't it - and having you notice means a lot to me.

Michael - That you could feel the tingle, means the words I chose, worked, and you more than read - you experienced (and that's the name of the game )/

Alison - Thank you Alison - I'd happily strain your oatmeal!

Margherita - You see beauty in everything, my friend, no matter how marred it may be, and that makes you an angel of the first order. Bless you.

Juju - Ah, I read your work and wish I could emulate your way with words; having you like this warms my heart.



JL
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11 posted 2012-01-19 01:07 PM


Very nice writing, J.
Visualized the scene, vivid emotion,
a perfection in poetry!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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