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rachaelfuchsberger
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0 posted 2012-01-17 01:20 PM



I knew you once.

Your lines.

Your contours.

Your muscles.

Your body.



I loved you once.

Your roughness.

Your gruffness.

Your toughness.

Your distance.



I wanted you once.

Your strength.

Your power.

Your mystery.

Your touch.

Your masculinity.



I knew you.

I loved you.

I wanted you.

Once.



But now.

The lines are jagged.

The contours sharp.

The muscles hard.

The body foreign.

You're too rough.

Too gruff.

Too tough.

Too distant.

The strength is weak.

The power low.

The mystery gone.

The touch hurts.

The masculinity disgusts.



I crave you now.

Your smooth lines.

Your soft contours.

Your subtle muscles.

Your supple body.



I need you now.

Your gentleness.

Your gracefulness.

Your softness.

Your closeness.



I beg you now.

For your tenderness.

Your prowess.

Your bluntness.

Your caress.

Your femininity.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

© Copyright 2012 Rachael Fuchsberger - All Rights Reserved
EmmaRose
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1 posted 2012-01-17 01:24 PM


No need to beg
on other hand, poem is good

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2012-01-17 01:37 PM


Femininity?

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

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3 posted 2012-01-17 01:46 PM


Yes. The opposite of masculinity.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2012-01-17 01:58 PM


I know what it is.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

rachaelfuchsberger
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5 posted 2012-01-17 02:59 PM


I don't understand your confusion.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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6 posted 2012-01-17 04:39 PM


Welcome back dear Rachael,

Interesting poem - I like how you contrast and lay your desire out there.

Good to see you back

xoxoxo
Z

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7 posted 2012-01-17 05:14 PM


"I beg you now.

For your tenderness.

Your prowess.

Your bluntness.

Your caress.

Your femininity."

I think this may be misconstrued as a plead
for femininity.. and not really a call for the male to act feminine...but what I think is being wished for is a sense of understanding of a womans feminine view of the world... not really acted out by her male partner...Tough guys-and bad boys are unable to do so as they might think people might think they are sissys, or have gay tendencies.


This is what I got from the poem...I might be wrong...but I enjoyed the poem anyway.



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8 posted 2012-01-17 05:29 PM


Thank you so much, Z. I always value your opinions.It was a realization that I'd been coming to for some time now, and we finally caught up with each other this past weekend.
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9 posted 2012-01-17 05:32 PM


ice,

I can understand your confusion, but this was really more about me realizing that I'm a lesbian, and not the bisexual I thought I was.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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10 posted 2012-01-18 10:02 AM


not to fret Rb...I am too after a couple of beers.  Poem was one of your better ones.
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11 posted 2012-01-18 10:43 AM


Thank you, Sir.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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12 posted 2012-01-18 04:12 PM


I agree, Dark man.  You are growing, my friend Ms R.

xoxoxo
z

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13 posted 2012-01-18 06:23 PM


"I can understand your confusion, but this was really more about me realizing that I'm a lesbian, and not the bisexual I thought I was."

rachael
This clears it up perfectly, thank you for the clarity..

The poem is excellent, I enjoyed reading it.

[This message has been edited by ice (01-19-2012 05:32 AM).]

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