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I Knew You Once, I Crave You Now

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rachaelfuchsberger
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I knew you once.

Your lines.

Your contours.

Your muscles.

Your body.



I loved you once.

Your roughness.

Your gruffness.

Your toughness.

Your distance.



I wanted you once.

Your strength.

Your power.

Your mystery.

Your touch.

Your masculinity.



I knew you.

I loved you.

I wanted you.

Once.



But now.

The lines are jagged.

The contours sharp.

The muscles hard.

The body foreign.

You're too rough.

Too gruff.

Too tough.

Too distant.

The strength is weak.

The power low.

The mystery gone.

The touch hurts.

The masculinity disgusts.



I crave you now.

Your smooth lines.

Your soft contours.

Your subtle muscles.

Your supple body.



I need you now.

Your gentleness.

Your gracefulness.

Your softness.

Your closeness.



I beg you now.

For your tenderness.

Your prowess.

Your bluntness.

Your caress.

Your femininity.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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1 posted 01-17-2012 01:24 PM       View Profile for EmmaRose   Email EmmaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EmmaRose

No need to beg
on other hand, poem is good
JerryPat2
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2 posted 01-17-2012 01:37 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Femininity?

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

rachaelfuchsberger
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3 posted 01-17-2012 01:46 PM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

Yes. The opposite of masculinity.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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I know what it is.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

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5 posted 01-17-2012 02:59 PM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

I don't understand your confusion.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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6 posted 01-17-2012 04:39 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Welcome back dear Rachael,

Interesting poem - I like how you contrast and lay your desire out there.

Good to see you back

xoxoxo
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7 posted 01-17-2012 05:14 PM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

"I beg you now.

For your tenderness.

Your prowess.

Your bluntness.

Your caress.

Your femininity."

I think this may be misconstrued as a plead
for femininity.. and not really a call for the male to act feminine...but what I think is being wished for is a sense of understanding of a womans feminine view of the world... not really acted out by her male partner...Tough guys-and bad boys are unable to do so as they might think people might think they are sissys, or have gay tendencies.


This is what I got from the poem...I might be wrong...but I enjoyed the poem anyway.


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8 posted 01-17-2012 05:29 PM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

Thank you so much, Z. I always value your opinions.It was a realization that I'd been coming to for some time now, and we finally caught up with each other this past weekend.
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9 posted 01-17-2012 05:32 PM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

ice,

I can understand your confusion, but this was really more about me realizing that I'm a lesbian, and not the bisexual I thought I was.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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10 posted 01-18-2012 10:02 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

not to fret Rb...I am too after a couple of beers.  Poem was one of your better ones.
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Thank you, Sir.

~Arana Darkwolf~
An' it harm none, do what ye will. Blessed be.

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I agree, Dark man.  You are growing, my friend Ms R.

xoxoxo
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13 posted 01-18-2012 06:23 PM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

"I can understand your confusion, but this was really more about me realizing that I'm a lesbian, and not the bisexual I thought I was."

rachael
This clears it up perfectly, thank you for the clarity..

The poem is excellent, I enjoyed reading it.

[This message has been edited by ice (01-19-2012 05:32 AM).]

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