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The Vulgar Garden

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bel1e
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0 posted 01-16-2012 07:09 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bel1e

dear torpor,
dear taper,


your longing dwindles in the rain,
mine echoes its hollow chord,
is too fragile,

my wherewithall is yellow pine,
the dark needs tending
and you won't tell me where you've gone,

I 've a sorrow garden,
flowers that grow wilder each night,

I am the river's cold heart,
receding, I am nothing, really~

dear torpor,
we lived on daisies
and afternoon light in the doldrums,

dear taper,
you loved better than I,

your words abate now,
abandon me on riddled wings,

dearest regret, dearer than I,
the fruit of errancy tastes bitter, doesn't it?


anonymity is not a name, but a lull,
a threshold of nothing but silence,
a sanctuary diminishing. gone blank.

the husk of my life narrows now into a blade~

tomorrow I will pour last night's storm
over my skin, catch it all in every pore,
the rain is grief-thick,

for without you
I am vulgar and uncouth.



             

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 01-16-2012 07:30 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

Without you I am vulgar and uncouth

BabyGirl this one really grabbed me and I love love love the graphic!


Lori
bel1e
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2 posted 01-16-2012 07:36 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Thanx Lori~

Glad you like it.

             

JerryPat2
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3 posted 01-16-2012 09:31 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Well, I can quite understand the torpor/taper concept, they are around to stand in for life when we humans decide to commit pseudo hari kari.

Like Lori, the graphic is asskicking.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 01-16-2012 11:04 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

babybel1e...you take me to the river so often with your pen..funeral wedding combo with voyeur windows watching.
bel1e
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5 posted 01-16-2012 11:26 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Mr. Pat....thank you for the insightful comment....lol...glad u liked the pic too!

Xoxo

             

bel1e
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6 posted 01-16-2012 11:27 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Why daddy...the river is one of the quickest places to get wet....thanks for letting me take u there...

Xoxo

             

Nicole
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7 posted 01-16-2012 12:12 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

I am the river's cold heart,
receding, I am nothing, really~

Oy vey...this one got me good.
OwlSA
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8 posted 01-16-2012 01:15 PM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

Belle, your intricate, exquisite, multi-layered exposť's are for me a classical ballet, an impressionistic painting, a Greek temple, a treasure-chest, indicative of a mind so interesting that I don't know how you fit it all inside your head.  

I always read your poetry in time-frozen slow motion (the way I eat mushrooms, my most favourite food in the world), so as not to miss a single nuance of its beauty.

My favourite, favourite line is:

"I have a sorrow garden"

Owl
JL
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9 posted 01-16-2012 02:16 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

"tomorrow I will pour last night's storm
over my skin, catch it all in every pore,
the rain is grief-thick,

for without you
I am vulgar and uncouth."


Steeped in a very deep emotional
struggle so brilliantly
portrayed in this write.
More than a poet lives in you, girl.
You make even renowned artists work
seem as a second hand store.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Margherita
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10 posted 01-16-2012 04:55 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

we lived on daisies
and afternoon light in the doldrums,


Such refined poetic language! You possess the art of expressing your somber emotions by holding them to the light .... as in sorrow/garden.

An important work!

Margherita

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11 posted 01-16-2012 07:31 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I so enjoy give and take poetry...
and you gave, and believed
every moment of this...

at least, that is how it is perceived
from my green eyes...

well done, m'friend.

bel1e
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12 posted 01-16-2012 08:59 PM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Owl....oh, lady....I am blushing to my core....thank you for such incredible praise and wonderful comments...and omg...I think I love mushrooms as much as you!!!!! ((((Thank you dear poet))))). Xoxo

             

bel1e
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13 posted 01-16-2012 09:02 PM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

JL....that would be my demon that haunts just about everything I write ....thank you for the awesome compliments, luv.

Xoxo

             

bel1e
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14 posted 01-16-2012 09:03 PM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Thank you, Margharita...this one was a life lesson, for sure....very hard to spill....thanks again!

             

bel1e
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15 posted 01-16-2012 09:05 PM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Hey there lady sunshine...thanks so much for taking that peek inside....

Xoxo

             

ebonygirl
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16 posted 01-16-2012 10:34 PM       View Profile for ebonygirl   Email ebonygirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ebonygirl

Enjoyed your poem Bel. I feel the truth in it.
Cool picture,
Ms. E
bel1e
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17 posted 01-16-2012 10:42 PM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Thanks Ms E~*~*~

             

OwlSA
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18 posted 01-17-2012 03:13 AM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

Smiles, Belle.  You know there are people who don't eat mushrooms!  And some who don't have poetry in their souls!  How do they manage to live, I wonder!  How rich is our life (if not our pockets) who do both!

Owl

bel1e
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19 posted 01-17-2012 05:25 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

ha ha ha~~~ amen to that, Owl !!!!!!!

XOXO

             

Michael
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20 posted 01-17-2012 02:23 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Amazing write.  Loved the "Dear Torpor" opening.  
quote:
anonymity is not a name, but a lull,
a threshold of nothing but silence,



great lines... kind of thrummed to the tune of emptiness being insatiable, yet how can we satiate something that is intangible in it's very essence?  Much enjoyed.

Michael
bel1e
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21 posted 01-17-2012 02:27 PM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

Hey Michael~

Thanks so much for checking this one out!

             

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22 posted 01-18-2012 01:15 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I love how your words parade in front of me with such style and grace.  Plus, I don't think anyone titles a poem like you do.  I have title envy for sure.  Baby Girl.  your poems read like water - they flow and just slide over my tongue.  Love them.  Also, I really appreciated that you put the graphic after the poem. I loved the picture and loved that it did not push in front of your poem.

Great job!
A
bel1e
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23 posted 01-18-2012 05:54 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

hey Alison,

thanks so much for the wonderful review!

I'm so pleased you enjoyed this~*~

             

ice
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24 posted 01-18-2012 10:41 AM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

Mind at sloth;
Drips slow, the candles wax
Rain dampens her core,
And puts the fire out.

But flowers widen, sucking in the wet
Petals floating, on swollen rivers of  pain..

And yet

Her thoughts are glowing
On the glint-heat edge of knife,
But still she feels the chill of damp.

As

Something holds the maid for ransom
Something long-gone, still has weight.

And parades outside her window-gate;

Where in her vulgar garden

* Priests in black gowns (are) were walking their rounds,
And binding with briars (her) my  joys and desires.

*William Blake--(1757-1827)--from "The Garden of Love"
 
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