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EmmaRose
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0 posted 2012-01-15 04:25 PM





A hungover moon
pins the pale sky
straining for voice
in the predawn opulence

where all that stays etched
is the sweat on the nightstand
where players collided
in lustful contortion

i am yours, you are mine
particles spun
both of sand and of sea

soldered as one
the wind lifts us through
where the earth has forgotten
us

for now we are strings
in God's greatest instrument

voiceless yet free

while the moon stays the night
with us.

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (01-16-2012 03:07 PM).]

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-01-15 04:47 PM


What a great word/non-word/made-up word is soddered . . .

"in the opulence of apathy," is a great line, EmmaRose, and so befitting the mood of today.

To be soddered with another, someone to hang onto, someone who will go to bat for you as the world is literally falling apart from within, is a wonderful thing to have gained.

Excellent poetry!

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

EmmaRose
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2 posted 2012-01-15 04:54 PM


Thanks JP. I appreciate your insight into the human experience Happy Sunday
JL
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3 posted 2012-01-15 04:58 PM


"for now we are strings in
God's greatest instrument

voiceless yet free

the moon stays the night
with us."


Oh, yeah...  
I love your "Fenceless".
Artfully beautiful poetry for sure.


JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Nicole
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4 posted 2012-01-15 05:05 PM


This poem is very nice, indeed.. it has two aspects that I really enjoyed.  I see the moon as a faceless voyeur, the apathy, but straining to feel what the two lovers do.  What imagery!
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5 posted 2012-01-16 01:26 AM


for now we are strings
in God's greatest instrument

voiceless yet free

This is so very beautiful!

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2012-01-16 05:41 AM


Ms Rose, the touch of sky eye caught my attention


OwlSA
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7 posted 2012-01-16 01:19 PM


Very lovely, EmmaRose.

Owl

Margherita
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8 posted 2012-01-16 05:02 PM


Very captivating in its stirring sensuousness, dear EmmaRose.

Margherita

ebonygirl
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9 posted 2012-01-16 11:04 PM


Enjoyed your poem Ms.Emma.
The moon and the lovers ,you have vividly painted.
Ms. E

EmmaRose
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10 posted 2012-01-17 08:43 AM


Thank you so much for stopping by and reading me Always appreciated
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