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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2012-01-14 07:24 AM



I'm falling into an abyss
listening for the sound of your tingle
forever and ever lost in your blues
I'm consumed, depleted by whispers
wrapped in a haunting quintessence
I hear your breath, a soft hiss
smell of cinnamon and ripe peaches
relentless upon my deliberate
the air around me shuddered
pfff, you puffed air through your spread
open and I once again shivered
with coup de foudre
as I tried to kiss your face off
my chest heaving palpitations
anticipating the heralding of you
sinking deeper and deeper in squander
for I am kissing blank
held in a prison, wanting escapism
freedom, free to hold flesh
down to its root
where is stored for safe keeping; intimacy
trying to keep a lid on fear
swimming in the murkiness of cimmerian
reaching, grasping, hands searching
sounds coming from my mouth
distant cousin to a sob
my voice echoes in my bluster
I choke on gloom
she is so beautiful it is hurtful
flawless
oh
I smell cinnamon and ripe peaches
she is close
now she is here
cradling my head on her breasts
soothing words
I'm here, I am here

©January 9, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

© Copyright 2012 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
Nicole
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Florida
1 posted 2012-01-14 08:40 AM


Oh it so is like falling.  When I read your poem, I felt the same mixture of feelings.  You wove them in very well.

avoir le coup de foudre; it is nothing short of breathtaking.

Very nice     

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
2 posted 2012-01-14 08:44 AM


my voice echoes in my bluster
"I choke on gloom
she is so beautiful it is hurtful
flawless
oh
I smell cinnamon and ripe peaches
she is close
now she is here
cradling my head on her breasts
soothing words
I'm here, I am here"

Superb writing, Jerry.
I felt the need for the closeness...
Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2012-01-14 09:04 AM


Breathtaking, it most certainly is, Nicole. You are a wonderful commenter and I thank you for you being here.

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If closeness you felt as you read my poem, JL, that is the ultimate in praise. Thank you.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2012-01-14 10:48 AM


Your muse is taking you to new heights my friend, this is golden.


Lori

JerryPat2
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5 posted 2012-01-14 10:55 AM


I have a good muse, that is a fact, Lori, but I also have fantastic inspiration which moves my fingers on the keyboard. Thank you for stopping by and commenting.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

Michael
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6 posted 2012-01-17 02:41 PM


Beautiful in its longing, my friend.  I know those words you speak of at the end can be magic.  Glad to see the universe finally dripped some happiness near you.  

Michael

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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South Louisiana
7 posted 2012-01-17 03:00 PM


Thanks, Michael, appreciate the kind words . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

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