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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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sometimes i wonder at the fragility of a single breath; pressed between shoulder blades. how the sound of a name can be held there; like a leaf, entombed in parchment awaiting a moment. that is where words become somatic, visceral, conscious... seeking to caress in lieu of something more tangible little empty things crouched in an abstract soliloquy, a hesitant tremble in this wanting, this need hopeless, helpless things dried up and lifeless it amounts to this: 36 years of exile thirty-six years. and the rubbish and ruin, my particular brand of destruction they mean nothing in this wait, when i can feel you breathe and roll to find you just out of reach. my little hope my beautiful distraction you hold me in your lifeline and i rest there content |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I like this. I relate to this. The words between the shoulder blades can, and do sometimes move into the chest cavity and HURTS! Words, hidden within can hurt. Anxiety attack certainly a possibility! Breathe deeply, breathe slowly. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
this is breathtakingly beautiful Nicole, well penned. Love is the life of the soul... |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
"they mean nothing in this wait, when i can feel you breathe and roll to find you just out of reach." Nicole, I felt as though I could hold these words in my arms because they were thick with desire for the beloved. Right or wrong this is how it spoke to me. Enjoyed, Ms. E |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Jerry, anxiety and I have a long history indeed. I like to think I'm "relatively well-adjusted" lol... most of the time. Thank you sir tracie, that's very sweet, thank you  MsE, No right or wrong when it comes to how something makes a person feel. Thank you for seeing this, and showing me your thoughts. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..songlike honesty..no better way to start one's busy day--(they are usually far between each other) ..enjoyed your poem..>>spiros |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Nicole...I can see this as an attic with memories and the lady sorting them with her eyes closed..pleasing view ms |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"sometimes i wonder at the fragility of a single breath; pressed between shoulder blades. how the sound of a name can be held there; like a leaf, entombed in parchment awaiting a moment." Breathtakingly beautiful poetry. I somehow doubt that's even a real word but since I seem at loss for some right now I'll take some poetic liberties and invent a word or two of my own Excellent verse here I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow, dear Nicole, another poetic creation from you of superb quality! Amazing. Margherita |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I have definately become a great fan of your poetry, Nicole. Ida |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Spiros, If I'm anything, its honest...I can't seem to shake that, even out of my poetry. Thank you D, She's a cluttery thing up there, thank you hoot, ((hugs)) It's a word now! Thank you very much, its so good to see you. Margherita, your comments always make me smile, thank you Ida, that is such a compliment, thank you |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"that is where words become somatic, visceral, conscious... seeking to caress in lieu of something more tangible little empty things crouched in an abstract soliloquy, a hesitant tremble in this wanting, this need hopeless, helpless things dried up and lifeless" The emotion is so thick here. And that, to me, is tangible even though untouchable. Very much enjoyed visiting your emotion. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Thank you, JL for visiting...your replies always bring a smile |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote:Got you by a few years there. Bet my pile of ashe is bigger than yours. It is nice to find that beautiful distraction, though I can feel the ache in the being out of reach part. Beautifully written, dear. Michael |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
ok. wow. I was drawn to the vulnerability in this...such lovely sway of emotion...I too can relate deeply to this...very stirring poem, Nicole~*~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Michael Maybe so, and true true. ThanksBelle Thank you for moving with it It's my belly-side, showing. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am so happy that I stopped in, Nicole. This is splendid writing. I enjoy your poetry so much. A |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excelent poetry---emotional, mature. All stanzas are well thought out. All are salient lines, so I cannot decide which ones to quote..I like that when it happens.. Thank you, Nicole |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Alison, I'm so happy you did too. I always enjoy your poetry and your replies.Ice, thank YOU... I do so enjoy your thoughts. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is exquisite and excellent... just incredible!! |
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