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the tail of a shooting star

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tracie66
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0 posted 01-05-2012 04:38 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66



just once I'd like to ride
the tail of a shooting star
imagine the ride I'd have
traveling from Jupiter to Mars
I'd tip my hat to the sleepy moon
blow a kiss to the milky way
hover over mercury
beckon her to play
I imagine the indigo sky
to be filled with celestial showers
and all the while
the sleepy moon
whiles away the hours

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

© Copyright 2012 Tracie Maree Collis - All Rights Reserved
bel1e
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1 posted 01-05-2012 05:37 AM       View Profile for bel1e   Email bel1e   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bel1e

take me with you!  

~fantastic!~

             

JerryPat2
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2 posted 01-05-2012 06:07 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Yeah, that'd be one hell of a ride alright, tracie66. I wouldn't mind tagging along for that little trip.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Nicole
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3 posted 01-05-2012 06:18 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

That would be quite a ride.     Very nice!
l'artiste
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4 posted 01-05-2012 12:11 PM       View Profile for l'artiste   Email l'artiste   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for l'artiste

Oh, how amazing this would be... I love the poem.
tracie66
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5 posted 01-06-2012 08:14 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

can picture us all hanging on for dear life.

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

Klassy Lassy
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6 posted 01-07-2012 01:02 AM       View Profile for Klassy Lassy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Klassy Lassy

Oh well, if we get tossed off in the Milky Way, we can go dancing there.  A friend tells me he's saving one for me midst all the stardust.  We should be able to catch another cosmic flight out!  

Tracie, I love the light-hearted whimsy of this.  What a ride, to be sure!  ~K
Margherita
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7 posted 01-07-2012 05:58 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Well, dear Tracie Maree, you just painted my favorite scenery. We are at home among the stars ... your words make me feel at ease within my element. Always in flight ...

Very lovely dream write.

Margherita
tracie66
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8 posted 01-07-2012 06:16 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

K & Margherita - glad I could take you on this starry ride of mine

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

JamesMichael
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9 posted 01-09-2012 01:34 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice...James
JL
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10 posted 01-09-2012 02:35 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

Nice write, remember to send a postcard.
JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

ice
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11 posted 01-09-2012 07:54 PM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

I saw the full moon tonight, whiling away the hours, on the western horizon. This poem reminds me of that moon, but although I looked close, I didn't see the comet you were riding..and yet, by reading this poem...I know you were there.....:-)

Lovely work, Tracie
tracie66
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12 posted 01-10-2012 04:52 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

thanks James & JL

you didn't see me waving then Ice? shame, was so hard trying to hang on while holding onto the tail of a shooting star with one hand thanks for your comment.

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

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13 posted 01-14-2012 01:39 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

This is so charming, Tracie.  I want to go too.  Love it.

Alison
Michael
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14 posted 01-14-2012 02:08 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This is an embraceable dream.   I can think of no place Id rather be right now.

Michael
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15 posted 01-16-2012 12:53 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like the way you think... and hope you get your wish! *S*
ebonygirl
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16 posted 01-16-2012 12:56 AM       View Profile for ebonygirl   Email ebonygirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ebonygirl

Enjoyed your poem, Tracie.
Ms. E
tracie66
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17 posted 01-20-2012 03:25 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

thanks Alison, Michael, Suthern & Miss E - would be the best ride, especially as all of you would be coming along for "the ride"

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

Sunshine
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18 posted 01-20-2012 11:16 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I love the young and whimsical play of this...
and you made me wonder - and think -
we enjoy the daylight, but miss so very much
what the moon could [can] share.



Enjoyed, Tracie!

Kit McCallum
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Oh, I want to come along too Tracie!  Thanks for the great smile and the wonderful trip ... I loved this momentary journey!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
jwesley
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20 posted 01-21-2012 11:22 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

I think I'll leap into your contrail, my friend; I'd then be following the trail of a real, live shooting star!!

j.
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21 posted 01-23-2012 05:18 AM       View Profile for katahdin   Email katahdin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for katahdin

Too cool! Thanks for the inspiration.
Kat >^..^<
tracie66
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22 posted 01-25-2012 04:07 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

we're building a tail longer than the shooting star itself - what a ride.
Thanks everyone for your lovely comments & for reading my lil poem.

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing

 
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