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Love is Everything
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Love is Everything |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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its time to don the mask to hide the bluest blues then the idiot questions seem to form in your head the blues are the blues you know it could be worse you are thinking too much about tomorrow and after wish you could lose feeling of putting her on the spot in your mind its her touch conjured up in smiles wetly a daily lucent occurrence you feel you've dreamt aloud reaching out for her grasping moaning within your throat your arms are much too short your heart's foreskin is dull, the eggs you sow of doubtful purity is it real or full-fledged chimera men like to care for things least real fathers must die; pass into tomorrow to bequeath realism to their sons so you file in a one-man cortege toward the path of your veriest love even as your heart feels the cleave of your see-through desires; banish naysayers; sing a hosanna canticle marching toward woman of earth your woman, love of your life ©December 25, 2011 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (01-03-2012 12:29 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How absolutely, deeply captivating, dear Jerry! You tug at my heartstrings with this one. So true, so true! Love is everything ... Yes! Margherita  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Many thanks, Margherita, and I see your poem this morning is about love also. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Dangit...I knew I missed one. /sigh "you feel you've dreamt aloud" This line is perfect - the poem surrounds it, it's awesome, and I like the whole of it - but this one line grabbed me. So, so real and very true. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This is absolutely perfect Jerry Lori |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY interesting! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you so much, Nicole. I appreciate your kind words. <><> You are sweet to say so, Lori. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ <><> Thank you secondhanddreampoet. <><> |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"even as your heart feels the cleave of your see-through desires; banish naysayers; sing a hosanna canticle marching toward woman of earth your woman, love of your life"  You hit the nail on the head! Excellent write Jerry. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Many thanks, JL, for taking the time and effort to read and comment. Your comments also hit the nail on the head. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
quote: now that's an interesting observation...women too suffer this malady...worst thing one can do...man or woman...is to fall in love with someone's potential,...then there's that whole hero syndrome thing to conquer... but that's neither here nor there~~loved the hosanna canticle...who could resist that? Great stuff, Mr. Pat~ write-on. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, bel1e, the hero syndrome is a difficult challenge to be sure. Thank you for your gracious remarks about my poem. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
"Marching toward woman of earth..." March on and forward, she awaits, this woman of earth. Ms.E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good Morning, Ms.E, good to see you here, and thank you for the pleasure of your compoany and nice comment. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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