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Open Poetry #47

autumns broken heart

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2012-01-02 02:53 PM

They were stones of the lovers lane
where west met a near death
onto the river of the shaped sides

Her brown jacket was an ode to autumns past
with her shoulder lining against the rim of the sun
and quietly, like the steps of night against the backdrop of her wooden door
she paused for the sky to take hold

A stone for a lover
lining with autumns heart
she remembered his eyes,
unraveling along autumns past

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2012-01-02 04:19 PM

"Her brown jacket was an ode to autumns past
with her shoulder lining against the rim of the sun
and quietly, like the steps of night against the backdrop of her wooden door
she paused for the sky to take hold"

Replete with shadows I could envision this scene.
Great read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

2 posted 2012-01-03 12:50 PM

Thanks, JL...happy you could see it front of you. Take care

Cheers

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2012-01-03 03:01 PM

She blends beautifully into Nature in the colour and mood of Autumn and the nearing of the end of the year and her life in this poem that seems to me to be the 2nd of a series of 4.

Owl

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