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bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

0 posted 2012-01-01 06:58 PM

Clothe me
in the mirth of tabrets
and tin dreams, leave me bruises
marked by lilacs, and nothing else,

drink deep of the body’s nectar
and break apart the words that bind us,

mandolin and amber, names
for the daughters we will never have,

bring forth moths to gnaw
the edges of an hour of stalled pendulums,
humming in their dark spectrums,

all silken fire and angry grace,
as I pull around me this shawl of rain,

for like Gretel, I have learned
where the sugar lies in the dark,
dark center of myth, night
closes around me like a fist

and I am nothing
but a broken spell, a fever,

a fever, red
falling prey
to whiskey’s sour hymn,
flush as the lining of a heart,

and the azaleas, ceaseless,
split apart my palm.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-01-01 07:05 PM

Damn! You just reach into the reader's body cavity and grip hard when you do your thing, Baby Doll. You are so very good with your fascinating wordplay. Excellent!

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (01-01-2012 09:28 PM).]

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

2 posted 2012-01-01 07:29 PM

Mr Pat~~

Omg I love my new nickname! ha ha ha~*~

Thanks for letting me reach in~*~

XOXO

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2012-01-01 08:06 PM

"I am nothing
but a broken spell, a fever,

a fever, red
falling prey
to whiskey’s sour hymn,
flush as the lining of a heart,

and the azaleas, ceaseless,
split apart my palm."

OK, "Baby Doll" the title drug me in only to get a bit of a taste of tart.
But that's just me...
I am sure there is more sugar here than meets the eye.
But then again, lemon and sugar are a great combo.

I do enjoy the way you can sew words together
and make an enjoyable read.
Very nice B.G...

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-01-01 09:24 PM

Sorry Baby Girl. I'll fix it. JL, you didn't have to pile on . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

5 posted 2012-01-01 09:26 PM

No way! I love it!!!!! Ha ha ha

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

6 posted 2012-01-01 09:27 PM

No!!!! Change it back! LOL

bel1e
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Posts 1631

7 posted 2012-01-01 09:31 PM

::::big goofy grin::::

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2012-01-01 09:46 PM

Hey, the parapraxis was there and I just couldn't help myself. Sorry Jerry...LOL.

But I got the slip and I can understand.
Yep...

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

9 posted 2012-01-01 09:55 PM

LMAO u guys....u totally made my evening!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2012-01-01 11:36 PM

I posted, you're letting another fun-time chance to slip away from you.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

11 posted 2012-01-02 03:40 AM

Nonsense! I'm on my way!

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

12 posted 2012-01-02 06:49 AM

this is absolutely divine!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

13 posted 2012-01-02 09:12 AM

Tracie, thanks for stopping in to read!

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

14 posted 2012-01-02 02:23 PM

quote:
mandolin and amber, names
for the daughters we will never have,

  Love that line.
  Dare to name the "myth" and you will break its power...  then you will have no reason to fear the dark.  Excellent reading, as always.

Michael

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

15 posted 2012-01-02 03:00 PM

Thanks so much, Michael...glad u enjoyed this...

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

16 posted 2012-01-03 02:41 PM

I am so glad to see you back here writing of those delicious dark and daring thoughts that make you who you are. I read your books all the time, and you are like an extremely rare and good wine for the mind.

Would love to see you and Michael take on something. Just know I read and admire.
Happy New Year!

Carpe'Diem
~ Mysteria ~

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

17 posted 2012-01-03 02:56 PM

Happy New Year, M~

Thanks so much for the encouragement!

It's good to be on these blue pages again!

XOXO

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

18 posted 2012-01-09 01:32 AM

A nice sensual slice...James

bel1e
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19 posted 2012-01-09 05:32 AM

Thanks so much, James!

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

20 posted 2012-01-13 12:17 PM

Such writing. You leave me with all my senses reeling. Okay, I did have to look up "tabret" (what a great Scrabble word) and my dictionary did not have it. Thank God for Google ...or I would not have slept. Honestly. This poem just brushes against me. It's perfection.

A

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

21 posted 2012-01-13 05:36 AM

Thank you for all the encouragement and support of my lunacy!

I love to experiment with language...sometimes it's a successful experiment...sometimes it is a flop...but I do appreciate you entertaining it with an open mind!

~write-on~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

22 posted 2012-01-13 11:31 AM

BBgirl...We realize we are nothing but broken spells until we are cast again by another lover's eyes...

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

23 posted 2012-01-13 01:32 PM

hey there Daddy~~

you are so right...that line spoke to you a little bit, huh?

Thanks for the look inside, luv~

XOXO

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

24 posted 2012-01-16 12:43 PM

mandolin and amber, names
for the daughters we will never have,

If I'd read no farther, I would have loved this, just for those lines. *S* But there were more lines to read... and they were superb, too.

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

25 posted 2012-01-16 01:05 AM

"For like Gretel..."
Enjoyed your thinking, Bel.
Ms. E

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

26 posted 2012-01-16 06:34 AM

suthern~~

thank you for the kind words <3

xoxo

bel1e
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Posts 1631

27 posted 2012-01-16 06:35 AM

Thank you, Ms. E~*~*

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