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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2011-12-31 01:03 AM

Sanderlings

Where the surf overturns . . .
wet foot prints - running,
three toes all facing the same way -
. . . fiddler crabs roll up the sand.
sanderlings race salt's foamy edge,
and she stands there,
knee deep,
long, wet,
black dress
swirling in the churn -
part of,
came from . . .
is
the sea. . .
~~~~
Breeze captured the sun,
pushed it down,
down - merged it with the sea
laid it beneath distant waves . . .
and she emerged in the dark
her face
glowing white,
like waves
touched by moonbeams
rushing up the sand
in the night -
sanderlings
rushing from her path.

© wesley james beard, jr.
december 2011

[This message has been edited by jwesley (12-31-2011 02:13 AM).]

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2011-12-31 01:17 AM

Ah what a pristine write. I can hear the surf and the gulls.
Enjoyed the journey.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2011-12-31 01:32 AM

Ah, Poet, I love this.

A

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2011-12-31 02:17 AM

Exquisite, Jimmy, I can smell the sea.

Owl

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

4 posted 2011-12-31 08:28 AM

Oh I do love the sea; next to the moon, 'tis one of my favorite things to include in poetry. There's such a vastness and timeless beauty in this poem. This is truly lovely...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2011-12-31 08:33 AM

Fantastic imagery, my friend. The woman? Great concept keeping her visible, but distance.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2012-01-02 08:59 AM

Thank you, my friends, for reading, replying and just being there...

j.

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 2012-01-03 03:29 PM

I really loved this one... such beautiful and sound writing. The last stanza was amazing to visualize and read. Well done.

Michael

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2012-01-16 12:13 PM

Breeze captured the sun,
pushed it down,
down - merged it with the sea
laid it beneath distant waves . . .
and she emerged in the dark

This mesmerizes in its beauty... you words are so vivid I'm not just reading, I'm THERE. *S*

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