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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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I should not have let my dreams Distort stark reality, For now it certainly seems Fruition can never be. I guess that I’ll never learn The uselessness of trying. I am stuck here with this yearn, Face all crumpled from crying But no! enough is enough! I’m locking my heart away! Living hollow might be tough But maybe somehow, some way, I can learn how to exist Without letting myself care. I’m tired of being dismissed - No one wants what I would share. I will hide behind façade... Masking me throughout the years, Until I am under sod. I vow to cry no more tears. I'll pretend that I'm plastic, Lacking soul and emotion. Will you notice the drastic Absence of my devotion? I think I've ceased to exist. She's captured your attention. I am sure I'll not be missed - Or even rate your mention. I can't drag this on and on Hoping you will look my way. Come the morning, I'll be gone - Even though I ache to stay. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
If this is reality, suthern, I say to you, don't go locking anything away. Just live for the moment. Let the moment come to YOU. Seize it at the proper time. As corny as it sounds, true love is just around the corner. You have two choices in life: |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You know, good poetry goes beyond the one who writes it. It speaks to many because the poet understands emotion or beauty or nature or humor or tragedy. Your poem catches my heart and allows me to say, "I have been there." Sure, I hope it is not about you in the present - but, if it is, I hope that writing this poetry is a purge. The poem stands alone. It's good. Love you A |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
am sure I'll not be missed - Or even rate your mention. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This makes me feel so sad because I feel it far beyond your words. It is also a timely reminder that the choices we make are ours alone, and to waste another moment that often run into days is pointless. The goodness and the love in our hearts is truly who we are, we can't dress it up or take away the best parts of ourselves because no one ever noticed....yanno! It's an opinion that isn't worthy of your heart. Southern gal, I love the way you write and the feelings I get when reading you. You're just beautiful!! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Will you notice the drastic "Absence of my devotion? I think I've ceased to exist. She's captured your attention. I am sure I'll not be missed - Or even rate your mention. I can't drag this on and on Hoping you will look my way. Come the morning, I'll be gone - Even though I ache to stay." Oh sweet suthern, you broke my heart in two. Wow! This really hurts deep. Love the write, hate the write. I'm going to print it out and tear it up, and say "NO...No...no!  JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This poem is written with such intensity that it seems to jump off the monitor to hit the core of the heart so hard. Dear Ruth, your loving heart is too precious and uniquely beautiful to be locked away! It has been hurt and that is ever so sad, but now it's in special need of your own love. To love and hug ourselves in such moments is the best thing we can do. This speaks powerfully to all those, and I fear there are many, too many, who have experienced a broken heart. May the seeds of pure love that are everpresent in every heart, sprout beautifully and may they never again be tramped over! Excellent write! Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; I am mastered totally by Love." (Rumi) |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
wow........the turmoil in this is written like resolve spinning down the page to its final resting place doubly good job on the ending....sighs...and hugs |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You dug deep to get this one out Ruth, and it is worth the hunt it took, poignant, and so true for many. Happy New Year. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I hope you are okay, dear Ruth. Guess, I'll just drop you a note right now. xoxoxo A |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
We meet only here and in moonbeams, my friend, but believe me, come morning, if you were gone, a chunk of me would also have left. j. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
And we all go on~~~ as those who have said it before, I can relate. I know so many will say to not give up or in to loneliness but sometimes just accepting what is can bring one peace, and then to share with others who also feel the same whether old or young can make one feel fulfilled.  Always great to read you, M |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Dear Suthern, You are Beauty realized, your poem stirred me deep. Ms. E |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
The ache in this is so palpable to the page...the beauty in mastering the gift of writing...finding the right words to marry to emotion....is the purely cathartic release the author experiences when the right balance is struck. This is a sad and soulsearching piece....write on, poet. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This is one of the most heartwrenching poems I have ever read... probably moreso at the thought of someone I care for so much having penned the words. ((hugs)) to you, Ruth. Know that I will be here for you any way I can. Michael |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You know, Ruth, you really can't be gone when we are still here to love you. And love you we do! A |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
so far I just want to send ~hugs~ to everyone here tonight ~hugs~ dear one I don't think it's in your nature to become the person you portray in this piece, you are way too caring & a sensitive soul.Love is the life of the soul... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
well said ! ... I'm sorry though, if you have actually joined that 'club' ... of all of us for whom this is 'reality': "I can learn how to exist Without letting myself care. I’m tired of being dismissed - No one wants what I would share." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...some times we have to release ourselfves from all of the turbulence we create in our mind to sort out the truth...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Hello sweet friend, hope you are doing fine. I think you have been "gone" for too long already ... We miss you. May this New Year unfold beautifully for you and may you be able to see and perceive yourself as the miracle you are. Do not allow your heart to "atrophy", that is not God's idea and it wouldn't please Him, He wants you in full bloom. Hugs, dear Poetess. Margherita |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Very sad in its desperation though it is crafted within such a loving heart |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My friends, If I tried to give the individual responses that each of your wonderful responses deserve, I'd turn into a blubbering fool within a few sentences and need several more weeks to recover.... and I've blubbered my foolishness enough already. *S* The support and love you've given me both here and off the forums has been both humbling and healing. Without spilling still more of my guts onto these blue pages, I'll simply say... into despair and depression, you lowered a lifeline of love for both me and my words... and I grasp it gratefully. I thank you all... but would be seriously remiss if I didn't send special thanks to Alison. Your heart is even bigger than the state you call home. Again, to all... my heartfelt thanks. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Darling friend, I knew you could not be gone -- we love you far too much to let you disappear. One thing I have learned about PIP is it truly is a home without walls. Welcome home. I missed you. With love, Alison |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
This poem is like a good country song, a ballad if you will, that has Played in the hearts of many people. Many will relate to it. Some who read it will be the one that has caused the pain. I believe it should be put to music, maybe add a sad refrain..'cause sometimes the spoken word need be raised to a different level...to have the greatest effect, when the spoken word will not suffice. Don't get me wrong, it is sad, but beautiful as a poem. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ruth, I have read your poem many times, but wasn't able to reply because it was filled with so much agony and suffering. I couldn't bear that somebody had done this to you and I could only wait, as I said in one or both my emails to you since this poem, until you were back and breathing free. It is so lovely to have you back and to know that you are healing. Love and hugs Owl |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ruth, my dear friend, plastic you'll never be, for you will love the one that cares, once he truly sees. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I appreciate that thought, ice, and thank you for it and the rest of your kind words... but that's a song I wouldn't want to hear. LOL Truth is, I would probably give way to my embarrassment at having bled onto these blue pages and have this removed... if not for the incredible and generous responses people have given. I may regret my words but treasure and embrace the love and support. *S* Alison, Owl & Sunshine: Thank you, sweet ladies... I so appreciate you... so very, very much! *S* |
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