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JL
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0 posted 2012-01-12 01:01 PM


Hazy Dreams of You



In the tranquility of my dreams I gaze into your sincerity…

You touch me.
You reveal a hidden want so persistent
and impatient –

apt only in hazy dreams of you.

Visions of you with me
Borrowed by my tacit desires –

you and I in a youthful life of devotion …

I dream you there,
as if inducing my thoughts to dream of us,
guiding those thoughts in a foggy haze…

Hazy sleepy dreams...

a bit awake, and somewhat asleep...

Dreams surreal,
you and I –

Hazy dreams of you…





ΘJLΘ

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

© Copyright 2012 JL - All Rights Reserved
bel1e
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1 posted 2012-01-12 01:04 PM


enchanting read, JL...I was captivated at first breath~

~just lovely~

xoxo

             

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 2012-01-12 01:29 PM


Yes, Baby girl is right about this one.
Very nice JL


Lori

ice
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3 posted 2012-01-12 02:59 PM


"you and I in a youthful life of devotion"

I can vouch for a life of devotion, J.L.
I have kept it youthful...but it takes work. work.

To me this is the most important line in the poem..which is good in all its parts.

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2012-01-12 05:16 PM


Enjoyed...James
Margherita
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5 posted 2012-01-12 05:54 PM


Very enticing indeed, JL!

I love it in its entirety and this ...

a bit awake, and somewhat asleep...

especially. At the edge of sleep we have the most charming visions.

You rendered these "hazy dreams" most beautifully.

Margherita


JL
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6 posted 2012-01-12 05:55 PM


Thanks…. BBG

Thanks…. LGR

Thanks….ICE

ho’omaika’i..eia ...JML

Thanks... Margherita

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Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

[This message has been edited by JL (01-12-2012 08:15 PM).]

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7 posted 2012-01-14 01:40 AM


I feel this.

A

JL
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8 posted 2012-01-14 09:17 AM


Thank you Alison!
I'm smiling a big smile...

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

EmmaRose
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9 posted 2012-01-15 04:07 PM


Love those whimsical dreams that we keep reaching for almost within our arms
JL
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10 posted 2012-01-15 04:12 PM


Me too, EmmaRose, me too.
Thank you for your reply!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Nicole
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11 posted 2012-01-15 05:07 PM


sigh...how did I miss this?  The dream-haze can be such a place of freedom.  Where want can definitely be persistent, impatient and unhindered.  Very nice, JL  
JL
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12 posted 2012-01-15 05:11 PM


With great humility I thank you, Nicole.
Thanks for the warm-hearted reply…



JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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13 posted 2012-01-16 01:27 AM


I dream you there,
as if inducing my thoughts to dream of us,
guiding those thoughts in a foggy haze…

Hazy dreams sure beat the cold clarity of reality! *S* This is beautiful, JL!

EmmaRose
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14 posted 2012-01-16 09:56 AM


Hazy is a beautiful blanklet that warms a cold night
May your blanket wrap  you in love always

JL
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15 posted 2012-01-16 02:21 PM


Ruth, you are so right!  Thanks.
----------------------
EmmaRose, Thank you for your
very thoughtful reply.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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