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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2011-12-04 01:23 PM


              from afar

The pure diamond-frost
sparkling in the cold, clear
  Winter moonlight,
the soft, fragrant blossoms
floating on a gentle
  Spring breeze,
the flaming wonders of an
  Autumn forest,
the warm, delicious sounds on a
  Summer evening,
all pale in remembering
the first bright sting of Love
and the loveliest of ladies …
I never knew.

           --- b. e. adams (12/4/2011)


[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (12-05-2011 07:10 AM).]

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Marchmadness
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1 posted 2011-12-04 05:29 PM


Sounds like the lovely lady missed out, Bruce. Her absence has produced a great poem though.
                      Ida

Margherita
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2 posted 2011-12-05 05:40 AM


quote:
The pure diamond-frost
sparkling in the cold, clear
  Winter moonlight,



This is one of my memories that will never ever fade ... it is maybe stronger than the first stings of love ...

But I understand, this is exquisite, dear Bruce.

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
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3 posted 2011-12-11 06:06 PM


Sending this back ti the top, Bruce.
                                  Ida

ebonygirl
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4 posted 2011-12-11 06:26 PM


I have to agree with Ida, someone surely missed out.
Wonderful images embraced in your poem.
Ms. E

katahdin
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5 posted 2011-12-11 07:59 PM


Lovely, enjoyed! My only critique would be that your seasons are out of order. You go from Spring to Autumn to Summer. ( Sorry I don't mean to be picky.) Just my observation and you can ignor it because it's your poem.
Kat >^..^<

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2011-12-11 09:03 PM


very nice...James
The Lady
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7 posted 2011-12-14 12:03 PM




wonderful, and that last line is great Bruce!

Nicole
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8 posted 2011-12-14 06:30 AM


I actually read this a couple different ways; each possibility equally as captivating.  I enjoy multiple readings in poems.
OwlSA
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9 posted 2011-12-17 04:23 AM


Bruce, I believe that she wants to alleviate the sting, and that she is all around you in the ether, and is no longer afar and is loving you and guiding you.  Look to the hills and the lake you both love/d and listen to her and what you never knew will become what you ever know and will warm your Christmas and your days to come.

Owl

bel1e
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10 posted 2011-12-29 02:58 PM


oh my~~~this is lovely~~~

             

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