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You said I reveal to much
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You said I reveal to much |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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You said I reveal to much My hand pressed against the paper Empty and void of any words Before I could word out my thoughts I thought about what you had said Your voiced cracked when you talked to me Your eyes caste down -mine fixed on you And I was left to interpret whether your worries were for me -Juju -"So you found a girl Who thinks really deep thoughts What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos [This message has been edited by Juju (11-28-2011 12:43 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I agree with James. A |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"And I was left to interpret whether your worries were for me" Enjoyed the poetry. (Now I want to know were they??) Love your style. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Succinctly, yet sensitively written - as I expect and always receive from you, my friend. A warm spot from me to you . . . j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Isn't that the case, always? The one in the wrong cannot look the one wronged in the eyes, and usually mumbled incoherent word sounds. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well done. Very well done. |
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