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Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2011-11-20 12:20 PM


Winter sharpens
Edges and lines
Cutting the soft
Frames of summer
As it sears
The landscape
Burning it
With serrated flame
Honing ice shards
To cut and abrade
The tender flesh
Of fall
Winter slices
Muted colors
Of dawn and dusk
Mocking tenderness
Lilting laughter liquid
Drifting into fog
Of ice and pollutants
Snow to ice
Touching same
Tender flesh
Kisses burn
With wicked
Delight

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Alison

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2islander2
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1 posted 2011-11-20 12:28 PM


alison, this is excellent, you play with words and enlighten them, i am fond of this poem, great poetry.

yann

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2 posted 2011-11-20 05:17 AM


Oh my, must have been a difficult situation, dear Alison, but how extremely beautiful your poetic inspiration!

Bravissima!

Love and warm hugs.
Margherita

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3 posted 2011-11-20 01:26 PM


I think I need to go put on another sweater! I just got chilled to the bone with this finely descriptive writing about ravages of an Alaska winter! Great writing, Lasky Girl!

Love you!
Linder Lou

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2011-11-20 02:16 PM


Loved it.Loved it.Loved it.

Poetry in static motion. Yes, indeed, this is a winner all the way around.

I've lived in Wyoming. I hear ya . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

Sunshine
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5 posted 2011-11-20 06:59 PM


You've made me remember
the very first time
the weather cooled in
middle California
that my dog's water bowl
iced over.

I remember sticking my finger
into the strange covering
over the water, and cracked
sharply!

Ice! I yelled it...
Ice! I felt it...

this was a very, very LONG time ago!

Yet, it was not near as clearly
wrought as your poem.



Very warm



Klassy Lassy
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6 posted 2011-11-21 12:37 PM


Ali, I always gravitate to your poems because I can feel them!  I know Alaskan winters are brutal, but you paint them beautiful with color and textures, and as cold as they are, you leave us with kisses of delight and a heart-warming smile.  Love this, and love you!  ~Karen
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7 posted 2011-11-21 01:08 PM


You've just made me appreciate 2 things very much: 1) Your beautiful poem that's so descriptive I felt I was there and not just here reading... and 2) I had temps some 100 degrees higher when dealing with my flat tire yesterday. LOL

Unpleasant subject... gorgeous write!!

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8 posted 2011-11-22 06:20 PM


Enjoyed...James
Alison
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9 posted 2011-11-27 11:46 PM


yann,

I thank you from the bottom of my little heart.  You are the best of the best.

Ali

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Heya Margherita,

Thank you for reading and warming a cold poem with the warmth of your concern.  It was all okay .. just cold and not a welcome surprise.

xoxoxo
Alison

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Linder Lou,

Hey Holler girl. You can bask in my hot air.  Love you.

Ali-sooner

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Thank you always, JP.  Your comments never fail (well rarely fail) to bring a smile to my face.  Thank you for all the nice things that you say.

A

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ICE!  ICE!

Love it, Sunshine.  Love you too.

A

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Karen,

I cannot express how truly warmed I was (and am) by your comment.  What a wonderful, loving thing to say.  Thank you.

Love,
Alison

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Ack, suthern.  I wanna be where you are right now.  Thank you, dearest friend.

Ali, the northern one

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James



Thank you
Ali

Marchmadness
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10 posted 2011-11-28 12:27 PM


Well, at least you got a lot of mileage out of that flat tire..
                            Ida

Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
11 posted 2011-11-29 01:15 AM


Yep, I did, didn't I!
xoxoxox
A

ice
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12 posted 2011-11-29 06:14 AM


ice and fire...excelent poetry
JL
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13 posted 2011-11-29 09:00 AM


Inspiration in bad situation.
Loved the poetry!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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