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ice
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0 posted 2011-11-03 08:21 AM


        
Frost killed impatiens.

Steady, incessant, spring and summer passes.
The world tilts, wobbling on its axis
To expose mid October-- when a blanket
Of icy crystals, descends, covering all;
Sending souls of tender plants to heaven.

All color becomes neutral, blacks and tans
Is diluted in the liquid change of season
Slowly, turgid limbs droop, and descend
Pasting the ground with stained glass stems.

A slight tilt exposes more chill- November
Sun shines weak, but brights the ground
Where no carved rock marks the place of remains
By death, all  becomes equal, all become same
Begonia, impatien-cleome, and petunia.

But Color and beauty remain
Repeated, in memory,  jotted down
On photographs with scribbled captions
"Our garden, two thousand eleven".

Do I feel a sense of sadness? yes.
But loss does not mean all is lost--
I carry the dead to the compost,

Accepting the difference, knowing
There is energy in those inanimate;
Knowing life formed, changes form-
And will renew in resurrected colors,
Come next spring, come next summer.

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suthern
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1 posted 2011-11-03 08:53 AM


But Color and beauty remain
Repeated, in memory,  jotted down
On photographs with scribbled captions
"Our garden, two thousand eleven".

And in poems that remind us bleak will pass, bulbs will send shoots up from the earth and spring will come again. Beautiful write!!!

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-11-03 08:57 AM


I really don't see the leaves falling and the flowers dying, and death per se, ice, but rather as a part of the grand evolution of life. I know you understand that also, although you do associate the flowers death with sadness. It is life's circle, around and around it goes.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

jwesley
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3 posted 2011-11-03 09:28 AM


Cool write, my friend, and while I sort of agree with Jerry, I see it slightly different.
If you substitute the leaves and flowers for humans, it's all the same cycle only on a longer scale, and if I am the one dying off, even though the species will be perpetuated by my seed,I'm gone --- and I'm sorry, I'm not real happy about that --- I really like living. I'd be just as happy if someone else carries on that part of the grand evolution.

Little narrow minded I guess, but I'd just as soon be the survivor.

Enjoyed the read...

j.

JL
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4 posted 2011-11-03 05:55 PM


"Do I feel a sense of sadness? yes.
But loss does not mean all is lost--
I carry the dead to the compost,"

Nice photo and poem.
This verse rang "the way-of-winter".

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Margherita
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5 posted 2011-11-04 09:07 AM


quote:
Accepting the difference, knowing
There is energy in those inanimate;
Knowing life formed, changes form-
And will renew in resurrected colors,
Come next spring, come next summer.



Fantastic conclusion to a wonderful, sensitive and even poignant poem, dear Ford.

When we align to what is, even the sadness is a gift then.

Margherita

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6 posted 2011-11-04 10:21 AM


I remember the first year I planted
impatiens and begonias
in my whiskey barrel, so
beautiful were the simple faces,
so silky the slendar stems,

and after thriving in that Illinois
spring and summer, the first icy
glance of Jack's frost
made them succumb
as photoed above,
and I, not knowing their death
would be so rapid,
so unforgiving...

almost didn't want to plant them again
the following year...

but I did, knowing that some day
I might have to lose my impatiens
to begonia as quickly
as they...



lovely work, Ford.


ice
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7 posted 2011-11-05 08:13 AM


I love all of these replies, and thank each, and all for reading my scribbles.

Having graduated from the William Carlos Williams school of imagists (last in my class) I have tried to show the world as I see it...perhaps in too much detail at times..

There is a sense of saddness in the poem, but that does not say there is not hope, and understanding of the process of life form into lifeform..

"I carry the dead to the compost"

Yes, but the word "compost" is the key to hope, and the theory mentioned.

The bodies of these plants, as well as all bodies are worked into the great scheme of connected lives, a form of inner dependence.

They will nurish the plants with their bodies energy, passing it on to a new generation of plants.

"Come next spring, Come next summer"

OwlSA
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8 posted 2011-11-05 02:11 PM


The first time I read this, I was too touched by it to answer.  Besides I was going through (and still am) some things of my own, but am now better able to reply to this.

I have read it several times – very slowly to imbibe it all and I felt every nuance of it, being a child of Nature, as you know.  

I know the sadness and the reality of what you photographed (and yet how the compost it will form will be the springboard of more life), but . . .  what I am trying to explain is the photograph and the actual view have, in my humble view, a different focus from each other.  I am wondering which of the two you saw at the time you photographed the impatiens.  I am not talking about the hope - I am not explaining myself very well - I can hear that - I am talking about the actual face value of the photograph.  The photo should be almost an embarrassment to the impatiens, a violation of their privacy, an insult to them – instead (besides being a tribute to their life and to their service of nourishing future generations of plants, impatiens or otherwise), the excellence and detail of the photo shows (in my humble opinion) a celebration of their beauty even in death because of the way your photograph has sneaked a view of the sunlight caressing them and highlighting the rich variety of brown and golds (a favourite colour combination of mine).  Now everyone really is going to think (know?) I am crazy, but to me it is almost like the last part of the ballet, Swan Lake.  

Owl

OwlSA
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9 posted 2011-11-05 03:06 PM


Forgot to say how clever Karilea's word play is on impatience and be(ing)-gone-ya at the end of her poem.

Owl

[This message has been edited by OwlSA (11-05-2011 04:14 PM).]

EmmaRose
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10 posted 2011-11-07 01:04 PM


I love to kick up the leaves that are drying
on the ground this time of year, wondering
their destiny, if they in fact will be the
same ones next year on the mother tree afterall?
Such ponderings, trivial and profound all at once.
Such is life..........
Very inspirational words you brought to this read today

ice
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11 posted 2011-11-08 06:15 AM


Thank you Dianna..your replies are always wrapped around deep thoughts..It shows you read carefully...I like that......:-)

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Emma
"Such ponderings, trivial and profound all at once."
The flowers are trivial, and profound at the same time. I am closer to plants in many ways than most people..They bring bread to my table, as I am a landscaper/garden designer.
Thank yopu for the reply......:-)

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

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