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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The running diatribe does this: It sparks. Then people blow on it. They add their straw. They fan the flame. They warm their hands to point the blame. Robbing branches from new trees, they burn their points with twigs of green. Robbing branches from new trees, They stood in voice. They branded me. They warm their hands to point the blame. Tbey add their straw. They fan the flame. Then all the people blow on it: It sparks. The diatribe does this. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent! The circle is... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It sparks. Then people blow on it. They add their straw. They fan the flame. They warm their hands to point the blame. These lines would be powerful and memorable even if they weren't reversed/repeated! Some rituals are painful ones... I hope you're okay! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm thinkin' this is real cool...  Lori |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Coming and going... a viscious circle. I like the form on this... as well the revelation of what can be incited in people by mere words. Well done. Michael |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
excellent analysis of today's political and media talk.It does little but stir up the many malious minded who themselves have no answers.jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh, wow, thanks all. I am trying to learn to just let my poems stand on their own, but this form (if you can call it that) is rather cryptic, huh? It's not just political talking heads, it's about all the yabbering. Although I confess I'm sooooooo glad that the pollsters finally quit calling my house now that the elections are over. I was getting dizzy. Thanks for so much for reading. I'm off to force feed myself some Shakespeare.  My love and gratitude to all. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Karen, This is among my favorite PiP poems. I love the structure - and I liked what you said and how you said it. So ... I snarfed it up and put it among my most liked poems. A |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I hope you realize that for all of the forms that are? Some are still waiting to be born. Mayhap under the name serenity. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You talk the blues better'n anybody I've run across, Karen. Sunshine has a point. ~* If they give you lined paper, write the other way. ~*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I LOVED this one. It's simple yet complicated at the same time, a very hard mix to incorporate into writing and yet it's produced right in front of us. I ~thoroughly~ enjoyed this piece, Serenity! |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Your words ring true, enjoyed, ms. e |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, I loved this Karen, the flow and form were absolutely wonderful! Best wishes, Kit |
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