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Open Poetry #47

If Eyes Can Speak

Anoo
Member

since 2011-01-23

Posts 55
UK

0 posted 2011-10-21 10:09 AM

When I heard your words
In a voice still tender
The smoothness of a pebble on the beach I felt
With unyielding hardness
Embedded in your words
Yet, treacherous are your eyes and your smile
The endearing discipline in your words they escape

At times I stay long,
tread upon risks to listen to your eyes
Be captured by the soft sheen of your gaze
Snuggle in the soft curve of your smile
Away they carry me where
The echoes of the words
Unheard

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-10-21 10:15 AM

THIS is excellent, Anoo.

Dissecting true emotion vs the counterfeit ones are most of the time impossible, and that is when carnal nature always makes the bad choice

~* The saddest words of tongue or pen are the words It might have been.--John Greenleaf Whittier ~*~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

2 posted 2011-10-21 11:06 AM

Nice poem. Each of the two verses could be a poem to itself.

Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2011-10-21 12:51 PM

At times I stay long,
tread upon risks to listen to your eyes
Be captured by the soft sheen of your gaze
Snuggle in the soft curve of your smile

I really like the picture you painted here!

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2011-10-21 02:52 PM

The words in this poem certainly can carry you. Powerful expression here. A lovely write.

Michael

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2011-10-21 07:00 PM

Very pretty. Yep the eyes have it, but there is so much more to this.

I really enjoyed your poem!!

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