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Open Poetry #47

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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2011-10-19 09:18 AM

You fell soft
to the tarp
of the welcoming
ground

i knew
you would catch me
as i watched
your descention

while i ached
at the window

and then you were gone

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2011-10-19 09:26 AM

ms ER....enjoyed this flutter of thought

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-10-19 09:33 AM

Mind-blowing and fascinating wordplay.

~* The saddest words of tongue or pen are the words It might have been.--John Greenleaf Whittier ~*~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2011-10-20 10:50 AM

Reminds me of the cliche, that nothing is ever as it seems.

Wonderful short verse, you captured the empty feeling so well.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2011-10-20 03:15 PM

"while i ached
at the window

and then you were gone"

A tumble through a short moment in life.
Enjoyed EmmaRose.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

[This message has been edited by JL (10-20-2011 05:44 PM).]

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