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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-10-16 04:06 PM

He looks upon a parcel of land
overgrown with trees
Envisions his piece of dirt
with home and garden planned
Undaunted by the sweat and pain
of its clearing
He works the daylight hard
to feel his worth in gain
Like the ant that takes on
a load that dwarfs his size
A single-handed kinda man
“He gets by with a little help
from his friends”

It is amazing in my eyes
to see one so driven
and lately feeling like
he's running out of time
by a heart so completely given
And I fear I'll be the death of him
what with getting lost
in the forest of my trees
Would that things were such
I married you for
your money honey
And there was nothing left
but leisure
and me to please
on earth for you to do
I worry not so much upon
money of the morrow
as I do the day
come too soon
filled with sorrow

LGR(C)10/16/11

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-10-16 04:55 PM

This is the most romantic damn poem I have ever read. Thank you, Lori, for putting the heart where it is supposed to be. A man's dream. Sometimes the dream becomes a nightmare, and sometimes the dream becomes smiles. I really like this poem, Lori, so much so I'm saving it. You have quite a lot of righteous feeling in your poetic pens.

~* The man who never alters his opinion is like standing water, and breeds reptiles of the mind.--William Blake ~*~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2011-10-16 05:05 PM

I really do think Jerry
expressed it best.
I'll just sit here and

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2011-10-16 08:26 PM

"He works the daylight hard
to feel his worth in gain
Like the ant that takes on
a load that dwarfs his size
A single-handed kinda man
“He gets by with a little help
from his friends”"

And he has a winner to recognize and appreciate the joint effort.

JL:

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-10-16 09:57 PM

Jerry you really know how to make me feel good about what I've written

Thank you my friend.
Lori

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2011-10-16 11:13 PM

Sunshine and JL, ditto that reply to Jerry!

Thank you!

Lori

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2011-10-17 09:04 AM

It is amazing in my eyes
to see one so driven
and lately feeling like
he's running out of time
by a heart so completely given
And I fear I'll be the death of him

It sounds more like you're the life of him... for a man (person) with dreams needs someone to believe in him and his dreams. *S* This is beautiful!!

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