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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2011-09-27 09:28 PM

i am ugly today, and the night is heavy
the moon on my breast
tightening this impossible ache;
i swallow your light in gasps,
left empty still, as a husk.
the air suffers the sky, thunderous
purpling the night
on
on
on
it rolls like a drum somewhere north
some tiny thunder

a heart is heavy today
hot red smack of an open hand
pink blooms to sting the dusk
the live oak cries, cicadas quiet
and the momentary silence
roars through my veins and ears

oh this murderous thought machine,
grinding on through the storm
i will unravel, one bare strand at a time;

i refuse this undoing

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

1 posted 2011-09-27 09:41 PM

Your writing is just so powerful! I love the resilience threaded through these words.

Best,
Amaryllis

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-09-27 09:46 PM

"i will unravel, one bare strand at a time;"

You betcha, Nicole. Living today, or reliving the past is necessary to come to grips with who you were, who you are, and, with that unraveling, one bare strand at a time, who you will become.

Loved this poem.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

3 posted 2011-09-28 01:34 AM

excellent... I sympathize, and we've had a couple of days of such distant curtain-openings hereabouts, too.

clever double use of "unravel"!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2011-09-28 02:10 AM

Nicole, your poetry is exquisite, eloquent, excellent, superbly sensitive, spellbinding, beautiful . . .

Did I say I rather like it (LOL!)?

I am sad about your pain, but grateful for your sake and ours that you are able to express it like this and turn it into this (and other) wonderful works of art. I can see that your poems of pain are cathartic and I am glad about that.

Owl

shelerellaSP
Junior Member

since 2011-08-12

Posts 42

5 posted 2011-09-28 02:20 AM

"I refuse this undoing" - my favorite line! The grief and sadness that comes simply drives me to my knees at times, but I'm stubborn enough to not be unraveled wholly. Love it.

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

6 posted 2011-09-28 07:42 PM

Amaryllis - Resilience is something I aim for, and I'm very happy that it came through in this. Thank you for reading, you leave such lovely replies.

Jerry - Thank you Sir, for seeing it the way that you did. It's a journey, this learning to accept my own human nature and all of it's shortcomings. A series of unravelings and reravelings (forgive...I'm pretty sure I just made those two words up)

In all seriousness though, the journey is only half of it - what we take from it, learn from it, is something altogether different and equally as important.

easy1 - Thank you, very much, indeed

Owl - Thank you, thank you, thank you. They are indeed cathartic. I've been trying to work on that... not necessarily stemming the flow, but trying to hone it a little bit. Your replies always make me smile.

shelerellaSP - It really does have the power to do that, sometimes. Stubbornness, tenacity, whatever it should be called - it is that fight to persevere that I am continually amazed by in humanity. Thank you

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2011-09-29 07:57 AM

I can relate. Your poem vibrates strongly and it is recorded by the heart of this reader.

Love,
Margherita

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

8 posted 2011-09-29 12:56 PM

Nicole, you are one of the most beautiful persons I've ever met... you couldn't be ugly on your worst day. I know well the emotion behind this piece, though, and you depict it very well.

Your spirit and willingness to fight are what distinguishes you... don't ever lose those qualities.

Michael

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

9 posted 2011-09-29 01:05 PM

you are soooooooooooo incredibly talented

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2011-09-30 10:13 PM

Can I ditto 1slick_lady? *S* This pulled me in and gripped me tightly.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

11 posted 2011-09-30 10:41 PM

Read this the other day ... thought I had replied...but don't see me anywhere...

Wonderful, thoughtful, perceptive piece, my friend.

j.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

12 posted 2011-09-30 10:55 PM

Excellent write, and yes, gripping...
Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

13 posted 2011-10-02 09:38 AM

Margherita - If I speak to the reader, then that is a high compliment indeed.  Thank you

Michael - My dear friend...you always know what to say.  Thank you for your insight and understanding, always.

1slick_lady - youuuuuuu are as well!!  thank you

suthern - /hugs thank you

jwesley - thank you for coming back!

JL - thank you very much!

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