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ken206573
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since 2008-10-14
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0 posted 2011-09-20 05:40 PM


It was a hotday
under a sun-blue
sky. Walking on the
sidewalk, while
the sun burned in
fury.
There was no wind,
the air was sharp,
tense with a
scent of fruit.
I pass an old pickup
with an old man.
His face I could not
see, dark like
storm clouds.
Sitting silently as
children laugh and
play from afar.
I walk through small
patches of snow,
the pickup vanish
as the children
comes toward me,
were they children?
I could not tell, their
faces were
dark shadows. I
try to spread my wings
but they was heavy as
lead. They come closer
laughing in dark shadows.
I pick something up and
throw it at them.
They shatter, the scenery
shatters as I fall
out of my
dream.

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JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
1 posted 2011-09-20 07:54 PM


Was that a dream or a nightmare?
Kinda scary...


JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

flash
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since 2010-11-28
Posts 213
miami beach, florida
2 posted 2011-09-20 08:28 PM


Quite an impactful, emotionally charged dream-frequented by the old and the young (you?) Hopefully not a nightmare.

Al  

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2011-09-21 04:15 AM


I think this is a well rendered nightmare. You may be the only one able to find the deeper meaning in what could well be a message of the subconscious mind.

Love,
Margherita

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