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pen&paper
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0 posted 2011-09-19 08:39 PM


Your hands
are so beautiful to me
the epitome of what can only be
gentle masculinity

I cannot tell you this, of course
It sounds to intimate for a time of but over a month
...doesn't it?
And I fear the confusion and mental interchanging
Of gentle with feminine
Which is neither the case, nor my meaning

But I love your hands
Looking at them...I feel them on my skin
Gentle, sure, and strong
Fingers long and lithe
Touching briefly that which defines me as woman
And I cannot breathe

I need not air
Only those hands need touch my skin
And I have life again

How it should be, is it not?

© Copyright 2011 Cierra L. Robbeloth - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2011-09-20 02:12 AM


Oh, brilliant!  Not only was I not disappointed, but this was greater than my "great expectations" that I mentioned in my reply to Poetry's a B!tch.

How succinctly you put the term "gentle masculinity" - I have used far too many words to explain what I mean.  I hope you don't mind if I use that term in the future, though not in a plagiaristic way as I won't use it in a poem.

Then your sensitive and superb and succint disclaimer of:

And I fear the confusion and mental interchanging
Of gentle with feminine
Which is neither the case, nor my meaning

Then too the poem not overly explicit.

Another masterpiece!

Owl

pen&paper
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2 posted 2011-09-20 02:15 AM


Use the term if you wish; in poetry, prose, or speech. I mind not.

I appreciate your kind words. It is a thrill that someone can understand exactly my purpose and meaning.

Thank you.

-Pen.

OwlSA
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3 posted 2011-09-20 02:42 AM


Thank you, Pen_ - I accept your gift with gratitude.  

I would be very surprised indeed if anyone (especially a poet) didn't understand your exact purpose and meaning in this poem, but I am pleased that my resonance with your poem resonates with you.

Namaste
Owl

flash
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since 2010-11-28
Posts 213
miami beach, florida
4 posted 2011-09-20 06:30 AM


Nice touch..and other hands can ease the pain..healing hands of a massage therapist, too...but on cold winter nights--alone with my own thoughts--I've also experienced the solace and comfort of my own hands. And even wrote this haiku:

the warmth
of my own hands. . .
winter moon


But no-one can doubt the efficacy and beauty of a lovers tender touch.

Enjoyed the read and thanks for sharing,

Al



Margherita
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Eternity
5 posted 2011-09-20 08:07 AM


I need not air
Only those hands need touch my skin
And I have life again


Everything you can imagine, can BE. And you expressed your thoughts most beautifully!

Love,
Margherita

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
6 posted 2011-09-20 10:03 AM


"I need not air
Only those hands need touch my skin
And I have life again"

Absolutely says it all ... perfect closing to this piece.

j.

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7 posted 2011-09-20 11:01 AM


I need not air
Only those hands need touch my skin
And I have life again

Oh, my! I love this! The gentle masculinity is perfect... and this is exquisitely beautiful!!

ken206573
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8 posted 2011-09-20 06:20 PM


My breath was stolen by your poetic words, each line blowed me away.
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