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OwlSA
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0 posted 2011-09-10 09:39 AM


MOON TOUCH
10 September 2011

And a shadow passed over the moon
and for a moment
I felt your breath
on the back of my neck
and I curved
my shoulders up and my head back
around your whispers,
my inspiration,
my Heathcliff, my Darcy, my Clyde,
my Crocodile Dundee.

Owl

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icebox
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in the shadows
1 posted 2011-09-10 09:41 AM


Elegant and so very emotional!

  

OwlSA
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2 posted 2011-09-10 09:51 AM


Thank you, Charly.  Smiles.

Owl

JL
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3 posted 2011-09-10 05:22 PM


Wow, innermost emotional depiction.
Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

MorningStar
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4 posted 2011-09-10 08:23 PM


Oh, this is so eloquent and beautiful.  I absolutely loved the love in this!

Aenea

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

JerryPat2
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5 posted 2011-09-10 08:25 PM


Such elegance and then there was Crocodile Dundee . . . It was truly a touching piece, Owl.

~~ The only reason I would take up walking is so that I could hear heavy breathing again. ~~

OwlSA
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6 posted 2011-09-11 02:19 AM


Thank you, JL.  Smiles.

Thank you, Aenea.  Glad you did.  Smiles.

Thank you, Jerry.  In my humble opinion, Crocodile Dundee has more of his own (or perhaps I should say my) kind of elegance and appeal than all of Heathcliff, Darcy and Clyde put together.  Smiles.

Owl

flash
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7 posted 2011-09-11 05:35 AM


Very poignant with strong emotional impact!

Enjoyed the read,

Al

Margherita
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8 posted 2011-09-11 06:36 AM


my inspiration

No doubt about that, dear Diana!

Very lovely!

Love,
Margherita

ebonygirl
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9 posted 2011-09-11 03:42 PM


Passionate, loved it,
Ms. E

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10 posted 2011-09-12 02:50 PM


I felt your breath
on the back of my neck
and I curved
my shoulders up and my head back
around your whispers,

You wrote the touch so beautifully I felt the hairs on my neck rise... simply lovely!

Klassy Lassy
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11 posted 2011-09-12 10:19 PM


I have goose flesh reading this, Diana.  It's so alive!     Lovely poem!

latearrival
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12 posted 2011-09-12 11:17 PM


How many of us actually turned our neck    up and rolled it back to feel that soft whisper as a light breeze? I know I did. beautiful writing. jo
OwlSA
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13 posted 2011-09-13 05:04 AM


Thank you, Flash.  Glad you enjoyed it.

Thank you, Margherita.  Giggles.

Thank you, eg.  Glad you liked it.

Thank you, Ruth, for your kind words and appreciation.

Thank you, Karen.  Glad you felt it so well.

Thank you, Jo – what a delightful way to respond to my poem and to say so!

Owl

Angel4aKing
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14 posted 2011-09-17 06:41 PM


Very CUTE!!! the title caught me ... the moon can be such a romanic topic for poetry!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

katahdin
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15 posted 2011-09-17 07:50 PM


Gave me goose-bumps, enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

OwlSA
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16 posted 2011-09-20 06:43 PM


Thank you, Angel4aKing and Kat.

Owl

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