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pen&paper
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0 posted 2011-09-06 02:29 AM



Oh, Pen and Paper, how I've missed you
Companion, soulmate, mine
To you, and only you, I reveal
That to which all the world is blind

I fault them not
For fault is mine own and
Without revelation, though in another's bed I lie,
I'll never be truly known

...to reveal to others
That which is known only to you,
Would that not be adultery?
Irony, that sin be found in truth

You are mine and I am yours
But...I am someone else's too, you see...
And as you neither smile nor bring me to laugh,
My loyalty goes to he

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-09-06 04:44 AM


quote:
And as you neither smile nor bring me to laugh,
my loyalty goes to he


Cute and intriguing piece. I am certain that those who "bring us to laugh" have got one chance more than the others.


M

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2 posted 2011-09-06 11:15 AM


Third stanza is my absolute favorite. It's deep and relate-able. Well done on this.
JerryPat2
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3 posted 2011-09-06 11:35 AM


Interestingly and well thought out ode to the paper and pen. Well done!

~~ How come abbreviated is such a long word? ~~

JL
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4 posted 2011-09-06 01:28 PM


Very creative thought, and write.
Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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