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Weak Daze
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Weak Daze |
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Haf_Alive Member
since 2011-09-04
Posts 56High in the Sky |
Weak daze march 21/11 It’s Tuesday today for me But today for me Might not be today for you I hope that on your today You don’t feel like I do Detached from the world I feel like a ghost Invisible to ppl Forgotten by most No matter what today brings Tomorrow’s already on it’s way I guess the choices you make right now Have an affect on tomorrows today Its tough to think good things When only metal surrounds you Especially when yesterday’s choice Are the consequences around you It’s like a drain And when I think My thoughts swirl down Like in a sink And all my thoughts That I just thunk Go down with That other junk I think tomorrows thoughts today To get a jumpstart when I wake I must be doing something wrong Cuz I keep making Mondays mistakes This is one of the poems i wrote while i was incarcerated. More to come! Haf_Alive |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome to Pip, dear Luke! You have written an impressive poem that reflects your experience and yet the feeling of being forlorn has inspired you to ponder your choices and to consider a different tomorrow. Every day is a new beginning and in this light your Mondays will most certainly transform and bring new confidence in the future. Enjoyed your first post. It is nice to see that you also enjoyed reading and commenting on other poets' offerings. Wishing you well. Love, Margherita |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Week days can be weak daze without doubt, but we have the option to make them a joyful past the day after. Intriguing write. Enjoyed. Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hi Luke, I so hope that your todays are better now. Freedom is something none of us should take for granted, and your poem illustrates that vividly. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on poems in PiP, including mine. It's going to be nice to get to know you here though the poems that you share and the comments that you write. Welcome to PiP. Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
No matter what today brings Tomorrow’s already on it’s way I guess the choices you make right now Have an affect on tomorrows today How very true! I like the path your thoughts took and hope your todays are much brighter now. Welcome to Passions!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Wishing you a new tomorrow 150% alive! Owl |
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Haf_Alive Member
since 2011-09-04
Posts 56High in the Sky |
Wow! you guys made me feel like i just won an award or something! Thank you all for the warm welcome! Margherita,i love your perspective. i've read a lot of your comments and you seem so full of knowledge. ----------------- JL, that's what i'm trying to do. harder some days than others. i'm glad you enjoyed ----------------- Alison, there are a lot of things that are uncertain right now, but i welcome the well wishes, so thank you! ----------------- suthern, thanks for the hospitality and your nice words ----------------- Owl, i love what you did there. very clever i look forward to reading and learning of you, and from you all. |
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